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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-16 08:17 PM


I am like
a character without any
distinguishing characteristics.
I am like
a paper doll without any
color or old fashioned clothing.
Like
A storm without a rainbow.
Or a jockey without a horse.
And I loved you
like a priest loves an athiest,
like a flower loves a destructive foot.
I carry up hill, my hands full of water.

Your mouth gets dryer as I curse
the unbalanced ground below me.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-16 08:22 PM


.....An entertaining juxtaposition of the normal and the bizarre.....or, to put it more succinctly, Wow!

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Laqe
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2 posted 2003-06-16 08:25 PM


I love this, it's very original.
It can be taken different ways, too.. That can help a poem stand the test of time, if it can be uniquely interpretted. Very nice.

.Echo.

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Canada eh.
3 posted 2003-06-16 08:27 PM


Excellent contrasts here...much enjoyed.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2003-06-17 03:32 AM


cool write!
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5 posted 2008-02-06 09:54 PM


Enjoyed the Write K

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