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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
We bought then The necklace of Roman Gold From the old Christian who sold jewels out his front door while he lived In back with his wife and two. He had shown us inside And fed us wine from his own cellar As his wife had prepared the bread for stew And told us tales from his days in Rome. I loved watching your eyes as rapt you listened And asked of peoples dress and food Then in eager hunger would lean toward the tale As if a child being read those 1000 tales. When alone that evening You let the cool links of gold hug The curve of throat and medallion lie Just in cleft of breast then laughed at the shine In lamp light saying it made stars On your skin. I loved your happiness then and knew this treasure Would someday be replaced with another But for now it suited you and the color of rose That flushed your shoulders and you were The stars and heavens whole. It was when you sat at my feet And lay your head in my lap that I touched its glow But feeling only the warmth of your neck and knew No treasure of earth could compare And I was Happy Just to be near. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Let the pages lay open for just a while I want to smell the ink and feel the parchment a little longer... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved your happiness then and knew this treasure Would someday be replaced with another But for now it suited you and the color of rose That flushed your shoulders and you were The stars and heavens whole. It was when you sat at my feet And lay your head in my lap that I touched its glow But feeling only the warmth of your neck and knew No treasure of earth could compare And I was Happy Just to be near. I'm loving the tenderness of these, Cap'n... an interesting contrast to the fire and grit of your Lacey series... Both demonstrate your incredible talent... but I just keep highlighting stanzas these days... Love it! |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
i am so in awe of these... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ron, I was lazing about outside.. 'catching a few rays' as we used to say.. and this feeling came over me.. there was something more interesting.. yes, far more interesting inside, here in Passions. I was not disappointed that I left my warm spot in the sun to come inside for a peek. And...this...this is beautiful! "I loved your happiness then and knew this treasure Would someday be replaced with another But for now it suited you and the color of rose That flushed your shoulders and you were The stars and heavens whole." Ahhh, now I can go back and worship the sun just a little more.. Thank you hugs, Nancy. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
http://www.grecoreport.com/phoenician.htm  I'll wash yer feet.  SO EASY, I AM!!!!  yer lovely... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I loved your happiness then and knew this treasure Would someday be replaced with another But for now it suited you and the color of rose That flushed your shoulders and you were The stars and heavens whole. Oh, Ron. How can it be so perfect? It is your heart that knows this and through words, mere words, you share your vision of perfection. Beautiful. Now see, I had to leave Passions last night and look what I missed. Too bad I don't have a beeper with message "CPAT Hair just posted. Find PC immediately." Patricia |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
This is a story written with beauties own pen, it had a peaceful and calming feel as I read each line, I felt the love and respect within and I enjoyed. Thank you for that, very well written. Sincerely Rick |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
When alone that evening You let the cool links of gold hug The curve of throat and medallion lie Just in cleft of breast then laughed at the shine In lamp light saying it made stars On your skin. I loved your happiness then and knew this treasure Would someday be replaced with another But for now it suited you and the color of rose That flushed your shoulders and you were The stars and heavens whole. Cpat~ This is exquisite, and damn, if my eyes aren't watering. Your poetry goes above and beyond the endless motion of rhyme shcemes and pieces of broken hearts..... You never, ever fail to move me in a gentle sweep. Your talent is endless, and YOU are quite something Sir~ *Bravo* |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So, you've traded in that ol' pick-up for a camel. Only the geography changes my friend. And that changes nothing. But...would we change a thing? |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wranx is right....the scenery different, but you write with the same heart. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Amazing Sir.....always~  Lauren~ |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
This is simply, a great read.I really enjoyed this. Jason |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
o..... lol fill in the blanks  you definately paint a beautiful picture, I don't know its just when I read you I think of valentino and stuff along those lines..*sigh* you make my muse demand I get all mushy and dream If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-18-2003 04:41 PM).] |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Excellent, Sir, Excellent! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
like I said before, I've got my camel hair bikini in my travel bag and am looking around for that little golden bejeweled wash basin I love this series, Ron. I can see it on papyrus, all rolled up with a tiny golden tassled ribbon, scented with aromatic oils. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ron, I felt as though I were there. This is exceptional, constructively...I think I would remove a cap or two that the word processor automatically threw in on ya.. I have that same nemesis from time to time. Your flow of words is awesome, a part of your style that amazes me. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is love, love! Cor |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
 ARCTIC WIND |
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