Dark Angel (a true serenity story for Maree)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-06-16 11:05 AM

"Ah wuz wondrin' where ya was--
now bring dem groceries here t'me.
I thought that you would miss da bus--
thank gawd you caught da last ferry."

I was white and trembling,
carrying a bag of booze
on my way to Mid City,
by way of Jackson avenue.

I did not know this shriveled prune,
leaning forward on her cane,
so I looked at her confused
as she said it once again:

"Come here you--come sit by me."
she pounded ground for emphasis
with the rubber tip of cane
as she licked her dry wide lips.

Then I noticed where I stood--
where a white girl should not be--
right outside "the projects" there
where even blacks tread carefully.

I sat by her most gratefully,
knowing this was not my world.
I heard her whisper then to me,
"You be crazy, lil' white girl."

Then she glared some men to shame
as if she were their old grammaw.
"Sit by me when dat bus come,
then you ride dat bus real far."

She didn't even look at me,
but sat there smacking her dry lips--
an old black angel growing wings--
sent to me? Yeah. Dat she was.

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

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in the shadows

1 posted 2003-06-16 11:11 AM

All old souls, regardless of their physical age, become caretakers of the young. It is an obligation which simply is accepted in time.

This is a wonderfully crafted story with many doorways leading to thoughts unwritten.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-06-16 11:12 AM

Maree will love this...
we never know from where
our angels will be...
but therein lies
the mystery...

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

3 posted 2003-06-16 11:15 AM

Great storytelling, great story.Loved it.

Jason

Edder
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4 posted 2003-06-16 11:47 AM

"Come here you--come sit by me."

yep, right there, cuz i could listen to you for hours...

Goldenrose
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5 posted 2003-06-16 11:54 AM

brilliant story, well written as usual.

thanks.

Goldenrose.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2003-06-16 12:30 PM

Yeah, dat she was...

Ceinwyn
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7 posted 2003-06-16 12:44 PM

you never cease to amaze me..4 real..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Nightshade

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just out of reach

8 posted 2003-06-16 12:50 PM

Karen, sweet thing...you have done it again. Into my library this goes. Awesome. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

skyshine

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Beneath the northern stars

9 posted 2003-06-16 01:07 PM

This is an amazing story and very well written. Angels on earth are awesome!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

10 posted 2003-06-16 01:15 PM

Serenity~
I am sorry I don't tell you often enough how much I enjoy the slices of life you write.
You're in a class by yourself, but I suspect you knew that already. 'Tis true~

Martie

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11 posted 2003-06-16 04:43 PM

serenity...I suspect if it had been the other way...you would have done the same. In fact, I know you would. This was great!

JamesMichael
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12 posted 2003-06-16 04:50 PM

Enjoyed...James

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-06-16 05:53 PM

WOW, Karilea is right.... I LOVE this.

Karen this is an absolutely brilliant write m'friend, what an experience, what a wonderful angel...I thank you for sharing your story with us and for thinking of me.

you're gorgeous ya know that ..right?

adding this to my library

look out for an email k

Maree

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (06-16-2003 05:59 PM).]

passing shadows
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displaced

14 posted 2003-06-17 03:46 AM

very cool!

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2003-06-17 09:26 PM

Thanks all, and yes, I do seem to have a league of angels, don't I?

to Maree.

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

16 posted 2003-07-23 03:22 AM

"She didn't even look at me,
but sat there smacking her dry lips--
an old black angel growing wings--
sent to me? Yeah. Dat she was."

Sent to you, indeed...just as YOU were sent to us.

Gawd...you never cease to amaze me, Karen.
I could see her...really SEE her as I read this.
You have a way of bringing stories to life with
your words; and I, too, could listen to you for hours.
I absolutely LOVE this, Karen.

Big hugs to you, lady..

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

PKreturns
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17 posted 2003-07-23 08:15 AM

Now you KNOW...I KNOW about this.
You gotta love our city.

serenity blaze
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18 posted 2003-07-23 09:32 PM

Thanks for digging up another of my personal favorites. (I think my favorites have less to do with skill and more to do with my favorite memories)

and Jer?

grin.

I didn't think you even KNEW that part of town. I went to Business College on Jackson Ave. tho (Soule') and yanno? my old dark angel was right--I AM a crazy lil white girl.

Hugs all.

Thanks for reading.

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