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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-06-16 06:52 AM

Once my heart was heavy,
So I took it out and put it carefully
In the bucket there,
Once my tears grew too many
So I hung my head and cried endlessly
In the bucket there,
Once my soul was weary
So I opened up removing easily
In the bucket there.

The bucket has grown full of cast off me
As I empty it into the salty cold sea
Then rinsing it all out to fill with sand
To build a castle with my own hand
That will only briefly built be
Till tide returns the sand to the sea.

So in the moments before the sun
Sea stroking beach devour has begun
And in the rising of a day
And fast falling of the night
Ends moonlight’s play
With light.

So I rise to leave the clinging sand
With an empty bucket in hand.

Gloom

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-06-16 06:56 AM

"The bucket has grown full of cast off me
As I empty it into the salty cold sea"

Much preferable than lugging that stuff around with ya.

hmmm.

*eyes twinkling*

Ouch. I just realized what I typed. Smacking myself in the head.

Thanks--I needed this.

A gentle reminder it is too--and your sand ocean metaphor is rendered nicely into cycles and the ephemeral quality of life.

Well done.

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

2 posted 2003-06-16 08:29 AM

good to see you here gloom, give us more please....

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-06-16 08:34 AM

"So I rise to leave the clinging sand
With an empty bucket in hand."

Great lines, and great write.

Susan

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-06-16 09:36 AM

How to enLIGHTen a GLOOMy one.. I enjoyed this PG...

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-07-23 03:03 AM

"Once my heart was heavy,
So I took it out and put it carefully
In the bucket there,
Once my tears grew too many
So I hung my head and cried endlessly
In the bucket there,
Once my soul was weary
So I opened up removing easily
In the bucket there.

The bucket has grown full of cast off me
As I empty it into the salty cold sea"

PG...I love the whole idea of these lines,
as well as the accompanying images that came to mind.
Wonderfully penned, poet sir.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-07-23 03:35 AM

Aszard, what can I say? you know I love to read you, always

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

7 posted 2003-07-23 08:38 AM

Thank you all
I am pleased you enjoy my words,

Gloom

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