Open Poetry #27 |
Tapestries |
Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I have seen the silver lining and touched the golden rim I looked away as sunlight slipped into her new moon skin I pined for eternal beauty but still, the image fades I lock my eyes upon it as if to trap it with my gaze But darker souls that slumbered now wake to place their claim on tapestries so recently adorned by heaven's frame engulfed in celestial flame "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I looked away as sunlight slipped into her new moon skin ======================= what a very cool image and personification that is. Thats an awesome couplet. Loved the closing images as well. Im still imagining your voice ... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is the first time I have read anything my you...I like the imagery of the sun sinking into the moon. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eromyna A wonderful write, enjoyed the read. |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
Beautifully written, one of those poems where anyone who reads it will be able to pick out a favourite phrase or couplet, for me it has to be "I looked away as sunlight slipped into her new moon skin" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is awesome. Makes one want to go back and read these marvelous words again. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I have seen the silver lining and touched the golden rim I looked away as sunlight slipped into her new moon skin I loved this first verse so much. Here's hoping there will be many more silver linings for you to see. Hugs Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-11-2003 10:08 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Shay~ The imagery is so creatively lovely in this piece~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Enjoyed the wonderfully woven fabric of this fine tapestry! Love and Light, EA |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
a wonderful flow to this, very much enjoyed. love gem xx |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write! |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
COOL |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
very Cool indeed lol ARCTIC WIND |
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