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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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sometimes I think I could burn a hole in my ceiling from staring at it too hard perhaps it would be a window to answers the night sky, maybe willing to narrow it's scope, to be less than it's billions of possibilities or perhaps that is impossible for it to do.... then.... it is left to me I've entered into that storied age where I know only this-- I don't know anything where the sun will rise-- but it's light reveals no insight certainly not past the skin of those I travel with (smoky glass, etched with ciphers) even my own... so many layers in us competing for screentime... I am fascinated yet I shy away from a window so large ....to see so much frightens.... I narrow it as much as I can I am called a good man yet I see the proof of the opposite around me in all of my familiar faces I feel love filling me for all people yet my lips can curl impatient and bitter as I stalk away from them my child is bright and alive yet I fear the seeds of darkness I may have planted there I feel the outreaching hands of love caressing my face or is it a shimmering oasis on the horizon? is MY love? I, still, am amazed at the reach of us our capacities to heal, to harm to forgive, to avenge to flip like a coin in the moon twinkling as mysterious as these stars only I see these coins have more than two sides and therefore ARE stars sharing light but so far apart...... I close the window in my ceiling turning eyes to the dim light of a bedside lamp it is said "we are here to learn...." I pick up a quarter and narrow it down: heads of hope tails of despair I flip it high towards the ceiling flick the lightswitch and the sounds *click* *clickityclick* I will learn tomorrow |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bri you completely blew my mind with this dont know whether to rub my eyes or cry . . . amazing . . . just amazing xxoo |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you Sue I appreciate it  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
M'friend you've outdone yourself and these: I am called a good man yet I see the proof of the opposite around me in all of my familiar faces I feel love filling me for all people yet my lips can curl impatient and bitter as I stalk away from them is everything i feel i am 2..just brilliant writing all around..damn |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you raphael i am stuck on black and white either everything sucks or it is all sublime or cringe maybe it is ALL gray the question that cant be answered headhurtinghere |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! awesome work! had to read this twice and I'll be back again |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you Dixie you always respond so nicely to my words and I appreciate that |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Bri I'm in the same place, on any given day..at any given moment..to love and hate with the same intensity. To have the reasoning to know what I have to do and then ignore it. To adore The Two Towers and yet despise those two scenes I've mentioned before. A vicious cycle I'm sick of, I'm just looking for a glipse of colour too dude..if I find any answers I'll be sure to share.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What is there to say...the sky searches itself here. You have written "the struggle"-- The need to understand all through the understanding self. "narrow it down"--only to find universes within universes--don't it hurt the head, baby? ouch. Mad Viking Genius.  and clear liquid light. This is eternal bri. You are a lovely soul... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sometimes I think I could burn a hole in my ceiling from staring at it too hard perhaps it would be a window to answers ~*~ Last night, had that hole occurred, the moon would have pulled you through... So many thoughts... each connected yet like a hermit, rambling off to find destiny May we all learn... in tomorrow...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bri - yw you know Life is just bittersweet Some good most runs bad bits of grey sometimes a rainbow and in between bittersweet this needs to breathe still xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-16-2003 08:27 PM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I knew that this one would be....something different. I, uhm, saw your notes on this and even in that wretched state, I saw a wonder forming |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile. Happy happy one "o"... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you all, friends |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
back again |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Brian...wow...I am in awe of this. "sometimes I think I could burn a hole in my ceiling from staring at it too hard perhaps it would be a window to answers the night sky, maybe willing to narrow it's scope, to be less than it's billions of possibilities or perhaps that is impossible for it to do.... then.... it is left to me" Love the thought of this, and the image created in my mind. And this... "to flip like a coin in the moon twinkling as mysterious as these stars only I see these coins have more than two sides and therefore ARE stars sharing light but so far apart...... I close the window in my ceiling turning eyes to the dim light of a bedside lamp it is said "we are here to learn...." I pick up a quarter and narrow it down: heads of hope tails of despair I flip it high towards the ceiling flick the lightswitch and the sounds *click* *clickityclick* I will learn tomorrow" Gawd...I just love that...SO COOL, you are. Hugs to you, friend...  "it is better to be a part of beauty |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I wasn't going to read this. It's long, and I haven't been able to concentrate on a long poem in quite a while. Reading takes work, and I've only just started reading short things again. (That means I'm getting better! YAY!) However, I read the first few lines, and I was hooked. You held my attention the whole way through, and I'm still in awe.... It's profound, and I love that, and it explores a great feeling. Not great to have.... but I've been there. I like it very much.  Kielo |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
This was was tucked away...and lucky for me some of your fans pulled it from its shelf for another round. "I've entered into that storied age where I know only this-- I don't know anything" That line says so, so much Brian...you words speak for millions (including me) "my child is bright and alive yet I fear the seeds of darkness I may have planted there" OMG! It's like you are reading my mind with this one...I feel this way so much, I see that things are better, but will those "dark" shadows fledge forth again and cause me to lose the wonderful things that I have??? Geez...you really made me think with this one! It was (for lack of a better word)...EXQUISITE! Into the library this one goes! Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves. |
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JaiOfHeaven Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 207California, Usa |
Man...you sure have a way with words. You are a very talented poet. I liked this alot: "I, still, am amazed at the reach of us our capacities to heal, to harm to forgive, to avenge to flip like a coin in the moon twinkling as mysterious as these stars" Thanks for sharing! Jai |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
where the sun will rise-- but it's light reveals no insight certainly not past the skin of those I travel with (smoky glass, etched with ciphers) ______________________- loved the language here great stuff Mike |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian Pondering and thoughtful...could see your heart quite beautiful with questions. Is it tomorrow yet? Hmmm, I guess there never is tomorrow, only today and yesterday. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Seems everything has already been said, so I shall just sit here and nod silently. Speechless I am!!! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Brian, As you can see by the responses above, you have touched on the universal. And well done, sir. This is the intelligent human curse. Inescapable, but in its own way, nourishing. It is the questions that keep me alive, not the answers. Kraw' |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
speechless... Susan C. |
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