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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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He doesn't talk with me as much as he does at me mostly in the lifeless drone of the miserable Shifting from topic to topic simultaneously an authority on everything and nothing with each word a tension mounts But then he'll laugh and for a moment there is life in his eyes and a calm in this storm of a human being He is my father an inescapable and often sobering truth but in those seconds it's not so bad it's not so bad [This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-16-2003 02:09 AM).] |
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apoetdreams Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 52NJ, USA |
Great expression of this feeling. I remember being right there where you are. Mixed emotions are often difficult to express. You succeeded.  Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Raphael, Peace... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
You are a great poet and an insightfull human being. In whatever way it happened, he is part of you. Thank you for sharing this poem. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Some people say a man becomes his father in time. I do not believe it. I think a man has the option, and if he chooses, he may become his father. If he fails to choose, he's liable to slide any any direction that seems to fill whatever vacuum he feels at the moment. In some cases it's nice to have that choice. In others, it's a desperate need. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
huuugssss for real dawg *sigh* If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks a poetsdreams for the compliment Larry that is the most beautiful gift I could ever ask for thanks Aw icebox first you compliment me than you call me a human being make up your mind lol I prefer to think of myself as a new species..i sure look like it Ed i hope not, he's not a bad man or doesn't mean to be but there are/were times that are just unforgivable you know..oh well such is life Yo G hugsssss back,, word yo [This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-16-2003 01:28 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: I felt like this on my wedding day . . . this touched me deep Yes . . . much peace as Larry has said xxoo |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
third stanza is a little immature for the content of the poem, but, the rest is masterpiece material. it's honest, and honesty wins. wins hearts. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Sue i wish you didn't christian I know what you're saying and I just added it to lighten things up but you're right it doesn't belong. I'll do away with it just tried to lighten the gloom and doom i keep writing grins..thanks |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I do feel the ouch in this.... I wish it wasnt so.... but I have learned that nothing is learned when everything can happen jeez I aint making no sense... I cant figure out if life sucks....or it is perfect because it seems to be both anyway this is one of my favorites of yours dude |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks dude just finished replying to yours grin..and to answer the question of whether it sucks or is perfect I'll flip that coin and wait for the answer |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is very touching for me Raphael. I don't speak to my father. He will die and I won't go to his funeral. Maybe I'll regret that in years after, but I just can't get past certain things now and don't know if I ever will. Thanks for the write. I'm glad to hear that it's not so bad for you...in some other people's lives, it's too bad...and that's sad. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
But then he'll laugh and for a moment there is life in his eyes and a calm in this storm of a human being Raph, this really touched me. If only those moments could last longer........I wish they could, for you, Raph. Heart hugs to you, my friend  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-16-2003 02:45 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Dix it's only been the last year or so we've talked and it still hangs by a thread..I love him for what he could be and hate him for what he is or at least was the jury's still out on that Ethel thanks for the words and hugs |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
yes..  i needed this. to make me feel sane. thanks m friend. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Feel being the operative words right..grins..thank gem |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write ARCTIC WIND |
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