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Shallows |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Ankle deep, Steps in and out of miracles Shells in strewn of grasses bending in the winds Pausing just to listen near the point of no return Trek in sands from harbor to unknown relinquished dims Stares, The little that I keep collecting into medicine bags Unconsciously, I perk as auditory fingerprints reminds And something that was lost awhile, my intuition finds Along the water, where the sky has never touched the earth And I am mostly fallible, sometimes only in my mind The frailty never quite occurred, nor will it be assigned While I seem ever wandering into the open forest found Somehow to travel distances, for instances I'm bound Copyright Kkh 7/31/03 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm smiling in the surprise of this--the meandering meter is deceptively gentle--how you managed to pack message-filled punches with a feather-light touch is beyond me. (I truly admire that ability.) Amazing grace, TD.... So beautifully constructed--the first stanza sets the tone--both detachment and discovery--Second stanza illustrates lusciously an inner turmoil: "Stares, The little that I keep collecting into medicine bags Unconsciously, I perk as auditory fingerprints reminds And something that was lost awhile, my intuition finds Along the water, where the sky has never touched the earth And the third nicely rounded out the introspection--I felt like I was walking in your footprints on the beach, and followed you as you carefully side-stepped grasses that might have hidden nests of waterfowl. My. smile. You inspire. |
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Poe_Pot_Pie Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 107Canada |
This is very nice. You do a wonderful job with desciption. I hope you continue to write poetry this charming. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
And I am mostly fallible, sometimes only in my mind The frailty never quite occurred, nor will it be assigned While I seem ever wandering into the open forest found Somehow to travel distances, for instances I'm bound This is one of the most interesting writes that I have ever read!! Amazing way you have with words TD. Hooked me right from the start. hugs, Chris  |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I so enjoy reading you.Theway your words flow, your imagery.You are the total package. angelblueyes |
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