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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Bumble Bee I left my feet around the curve in the thrash of wind, caress of dust beneath the hum of street wire girly lust that was my first touch. I thought they’d stay with me always within the amber and the brown me a little bumble bee a tangle of light a tenderness of flight. I used to ride a bike the ones with Harley handle bars up and down the Christian worship where a stream once flowed and one-armed men mowed their troubles away Vietnam. I’d zig-zag my way into dreams past fibro charms and bricked boxes with picket fences left for last what would become of my past? And then I’d hear my mum blast Mari, Mari. [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (07-30-2003 09:57 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I left my feet around the curve in the thrash of wind, caress of dust beneath the hum of street wire girly lust ~*~ I can see why voices touched you... because you reached out and touched them first... this is more than lovely... 'tis a  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
awww Maree...you touch me with all your poetry, with this memory you so touch and capture so much feeling within your imagery, it makes me wish that I had written so well....it's wonderful to read your poetry!!  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh my...your images are so beautifully clear in my mind. This is lovely. Patricia |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"beneath the hum of street wire girly lust" Just the above line, is worth the price of admission. Extra nice Maree. Ed *once again, wondering why he sold his bike* |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wish I could write like that! jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OHMYGOSH!! Incredible writing! I love this...and I'm keeping it!  ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
She posted..I'm in heaven grins You have a dreamlike way with words, you always take us with you for the ride. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahh yes Maree . . . a dream within a dream I love looking into your mind it fascinates me thank you xxoo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I left my feet around the curve in the thrash of wind, caress of dust beneath the hum of street wire girly lust that was my first touch. I thought they’d stay with me always within the amber and the brown ================================ you will already know this brown eyed girlie is loving this one  love the mix of surreal and abstract here... and YES...its always groovy when Poetess Maree posts.!!  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Same handle bars, plus a banana seat...remember those? I really loved this piece. Susan C. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
there is depth in this write, and a touch of sorrow~ M |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now THAT'S poetry! Wow, what a ride! You take such simple things, images of ordinary things, and make them glow with magic -- well done. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh Maree, what a treat you have gifted us with here today! A rare treat, too, it is.  I'm going to keep this, Lady, because it so good, and it may be a while before I see another one of yours.  Hugs to you, Lady Ethel |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yes I must admit in the most sincere way your words are far better than chocolate...hahaha that's saying alot coming from me  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (07-31-2003 12:55 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I'd like to echo JM's reply (so what else is new?!?) --a "mix of surreal and abstract" --and very skillfully done at that!  EA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
M, gorgeous poem! your imagery in this is absolutely stunning, you really brought it to life. Glad to see you. I have missed you. Talk to you soon. Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such vivid imagery... so very well written... thanks for taking us on the ride. *S* |
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Velociraptor1 Junior Member
since 2003-07-23
Posts 14Australia |
Hi mum i like your poem i read it and it interests me  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all so very much for your lovely replies and for popping in to read me  and Susan.C yup I remember those banana seats. hehe. Maree fate is not just |
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