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Branches (first attempt at a Triolet for Serenity's challenge)
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Branches (first attempt at a Triolet for Serenity's challenge) |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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 . . . Holding tender, nature's tapestries Raised to heaven, arms in praise Branches bear the gifts of trees Holding tender, nature's tapestries Swaying, singing in an autumn breeze Dove of peace high in branch does gaze Holding tender, nature's tapestries Raised to heaven, arms in praise ~ . . . Chris Barker July 2003 ~~~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhhh it is PERFECT and BEAUTIFUL! Good for you Chris, God I love to see all of this, love to see you writing . . . You have done wonderfully For a little ole form, it is kind of tough isnt it? To get that ONE resounding line right. I love this xxoo |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
beautiful Chris..you know what? I was going to do this same one, but yours was to good to have competition. I might have to do yellow again..haha  insanity is not a crime |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
oh this was so beautiful! Susan C. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou Sue, yes they are a bit difficult although they are short. (hee hee...sorta like me)  Wind - yes, I just found that out in the challenge forum! I can't believe it. Well...great minds think alike. Yes..please do a yellow one!!! I know! A yellow triolet. hee hee |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great one Chris...now if I can just get this form down. ~Hugs, luv, and miss ya, Teed~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
"Raised to heaven, arms in praise Branches bear the gifts of trees" I love your imagery, Chris. This poem is excellent! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou so much Susan, Nancylee & El. hugs! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
OMG.... These are NOT easy... and yet, look at the lift of limb and grace of whim... you, m'dear... wrote a triolet! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karilea - yes....I did....didn't I?!! Yippee! Annabelle is sooooo proud. thanks for your sweet comments. hugs! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wahoooooo I'm enjoying these. A challenge well met Chris.  Maree. fate is not just |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thanks Maree! Yes, it is fun learning new forms of poetry....well, new to me anyway! lol. hugs! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thanks Maree! Yes, it is fun learning new forms of poetry....well, new to me anyway! lol. hugs! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was wonderful.The imagery was great.A challenge well met. angelblueyes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 Just beautiful Chris! You have met the challenge with so much grace--you took me there with you, and I thank you for that. Love you lady! (and methinks you found a form you like? I hope so, you do this so well...)  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
angelblueyes - thankyou so much for reading and commenting. Karen - whew! I am so glad that you liked this. I don't know if it is a "new form" for me....lol...I think I have brain freeze now! We'll see. luv ya too lady! Thankyou. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, I LOVE this, Chris. It's so beautiful. I love that form, too. It does look hard, though. I think I will try it, though. Aren't these challenges fun? I'm loving these.  Hugs to you, my friend  Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dixie & Ethel, thankyou so much!!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Branches bear the gifts of trees Holding tender, nature's tapestries Swaying, singing in an autumn breeze ============================= Well this is a tree huggers version of heaven Chris this is just so very lovely... Holding tender, nature's tapestries what a beautiful turn of phrase. Excellent rise to the challenge poetess girlie "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Well done, Chris!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Good God, woman! This is perfect. I just did my first triolet too...but nothing compared to what you have here. This is so good...just incredible. Patricia |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
JanetMarie, Elizabeth & Patricia, thankyou poetess's three!! |
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