Soften the Voice That Chatters Alone

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Open Poetry #27

Soften the Voice That Chatters Alone

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-30 01:42 AM

How soft
your voice
still
in deaf night.

Like a hazy ringed
cloud
around the moon.
Or was it just my eyes
that saw,
fog falling
to the earth?
Grasping, clinging
to our legs as if
hoping for a taste
of what it's like to be human.

In mirror
bound spine,
numb figure walking
like shadow
dancing..
Splashing in mud puddles,
that reflect
the face of a
water starved morning.

In the atmosphere,
a drifting dragonfly chatters
to itself.
"Lonliness is worse,
you've got to try to
stick with a buzzing
flock of your own kind."
As catching fire in
a system, last sight
eclipsed moon of
Jupiter.

Hear soft voice,
sway gently
over a depressed
cloud,
the voice can
be clearly heard
now.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-07-30 02:00 AM

"Lonliness is worse,
you've got to try to
stick with a buzzing
flock of your own kind."

oh yes.

That's why I'm HERE.

Enjoyed.

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

2 posted 2003-07-30 04:43 AM

This is a very good read.I will have to read again to get the full impact. Maggie

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-07-30 04:57 AM

"Like a hazy ringed
cloud
around the moon.
Or was it just my eyes
that saw,
fog falling
to the earth?"

a beautiful image here

the whole concept is terrific, melancholy beautiful...love the entire write but those lines got me to close my eyes and see what I've seen a million times

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-07-30 12:21 PM

great images setting the mood as always great writing

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-07-30 12:54 PM

Kaoru - yes indeed . . .
lonely and alone two
extremely different things . . .
You write beautifully
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (07-30-2003 02:43 PM).]

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2003-07-30 07:09 PM

"In the atmosphere,
a drifting dragonfly chatters
to itself."

You leave me wondering where you get the stuff you write...

The entire thing was astonishing..

Do you realize what a fan I have become?

Susan C.

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