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I'm New....this might be a sad poem for some... |
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~*Tantalize*~ Junior Member
since 2003-07-29
Posts 26Sunny California (San Francisco Bay Area) |
My best friend had a baby last year and when he was 7 weeks old, he died from Sudden Infant Death Syndrome (SIDS) so I wrote this poem for her and framed it and left it for her. What do you think. I have another one that I wrote for her right after t happened, but I wasn't sure how people would react to something sad, so I thought I'd be safe and post this one first. Tell me what you think and if you'd like the other one. ~Jen I'm sure today is hard for you To be without your son If God hadn't taken him Today he'd be turning One I have seen how much it's been hurting you To go on without his love But now you have an angel Watching over you from above I know he knew you loved him As only a mother could And if he could be here to love you back am positive that he would God knew he loved you But He wanted his love too So without an explanation, he was gone Leaving you not knowing what to do Mason would want you to carry on Even though it may be hard Try to carry on knowing that fact that his love is never far One day you will see him again And I know what he will do He will look you in the eyes and say Mommy I have missed you |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'd be a fool if I didn't tell you that this made me cry...cos I can't stop bawling *sigh* If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to PIP. An emotive entrance for sure, but so tenderly conveyed. Never pause the write waiting to burn bright. Look forward to reading you. ThisDiamond |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There is no pain to match it, no despair so deep.... and you bring it out very well. Your friend is lucky to have you, and we're lucky to have you too, if this first post is any indication of the way you write. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mick Hawkes Member
since 2000-10-26
Posts 90Tees-side , England |
The gift of the poem to your friend is what true friendship is surely all about & i'm sure it ment alot to her. welcome to PIP & i hope you put in the other poem, i look forward to reading it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
The last line is really effective. Beautiful thoughts...James |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Your friend is a very lucky person to have one such as yourself to give peace and comfort, which I am sure she knows. This is so beautiful, and will be a comfort to any who have experienced this dreadful pain...to lose a child is a pain that cuts the deepest into the heart. You're a very welcomed addition to our family here, and I for one, will look forward to seeing you here regularly! God Bless.....~~S~~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
a very sincere poem i hope they will meet one day |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A lovely, thoughtful gift, Jen. Welcome to Passions. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions! This was a very loving gesture on your part. You sound like a very caring person and a good friend. I look forward to seeing more of your writing. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tantalize, Welcome and a wonderful gesture. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You have a kind heart, a loving soul and express yourself beautifully through poetry--you've come to the "write" place--Passions! I like you already!  Warm welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
~*Tantalize*~ - a poem well done for a friend in need. Your heart is true, your pen is of tenderness... BC |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Lovely, Jen. This poem is beautiful... Welcome to PiP! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lovely Jen. Welcome to Passions! Enjoy yourself here. hugs, Chris |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jennifer~ Welcome to our little circle of poets and friends~ Your compassion for your friend speaks so softly in your penning~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a wonderful, compassionate write. *S* Welcome to Passions! *S* |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Every scrap of comfort a grieving mother can receive is worth the effort. I am sure she welocmed your poem. Joyce |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
To wrap a friend in such a blanket of love, says a lot about you - welcome to Passions, and although this was sad, you did an excellent job on it. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I am a little late for welcoming you..but I will honestly tell you that this shook me in its saddnes. don't worry, there is nothing wrong with writing sad poetry. I welcome it insanity is not a crime |
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Ankaria Junior Member
since 2003-07-26
Posts 35Sask. Canada |
Oh that's a beautiful piece! You have a very comforting tone. Good luck and have fun on the forum.  |
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~*Tantalize*~ Junior Member
since 2003-07-29
Posts 26Sunny California (San Francisco Bay Area) |
Hey guys, wow, I am glad eveyone likes my work. I am used to posting my work on boards that get no response, this place is AMAZING! Thank you all SO much for replying! Ill dig up some more work and post it, ( I haven't been really too into writing lately, lifes been a bit rough!) But, THANK YOU AGAIN! |
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