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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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they are forming their shadows i await mine in the background, we have lost our destiny; neither life nor death claims us, they hang like question marks and provide little comfort but take me in their blackness, as i yield, flat as an inkblot, we are silent partners in a freelance script that has become us, they have yet to know my name, tho i wander in their kingdom, as moon now hides the morning, i begin to own my thoughts again, they are rooted but unknowing, i tangle with my history, battling fear of open highways and fortune tellers that warn of poets, i know that i am breathing as they catch the stars that are dividing, upon their stirring branches, now suspended, i am mapless, this was not supposed to happen, tho i thrive now in the weighlessness, but dance upon my tombstone, as some days i fear exposure, when i am with them, i remember i existed once a sapling, i wonder if my others even know that i have left them [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (07-27-2003 09:31 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inkedgoddess - I read into your words and see what I see... BC |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Michele you have brought the entire story to unfold here indeed . . . I, too exist as you say and often wonder if anyone would even notice . . . amazing me yet again xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 this touches deep |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
Goddess You continue to amaze me a wandering generality dead waiting to be buried amongst the wage slaves a life of quiet desperation couldnt they have warned you a little earlier sheesh Awesome write as always, I look forward to more Mike . . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream . . . [This message has been edited by dreambuilder (07-27-2003 08:43 AM).] |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
As moon hides the morning I begin to own my thoughts again. Such a lovely image.Great poem. Maggie |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
very nice, indeed! love the title and the "freelance script" line, that one's especially superb, methinks Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
we have lost our destiny; neither life nor death claims us, Mish these lines set me off never read lines that so clearly and simply and define what i am..nevermind |
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IntoTheFlames Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 92Va, USA |
Wow!  great write! ~*:butterfly:*~Summer~*:butterfly:*~ |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"they hang us like question marks" wow..that was awesome insanity is not a crime |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
they hang like question marks and provide little comfort but take me in their blackness, as i yield, flat as an inkblot, we are silent partners in a freelance script that has become us, Amazing writing Michele.  Hugs  Ethel |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for reading and understanding this jumble, i could use help with the line breaks, it seems kind of choppy, if any one has a suggestion, tell me............i can take it,,,,,,,, |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You are a tough lady, oops goddess! Dancing upon your tombstone to the delight of those who live and know ... and love you. Great write. Love, Margherita |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Terrific as always and I get the meaning! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You not only look like a goddess--you write like one!  EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
What EA just said.. Plus..what an amazing talent you are.. Fantastic write! ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thank you maguerite what a nice thing to say. bboy.....sometimes, you don't you know, but thank you when you do.makes me feel like i am understood once in a while thank you ea. for the nice compliment and enchanted one, thanks for stopping in too |
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