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Disgust (littlewing's challenge...writing outside the box)
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Disgust (littlewing's challenge...writing outside the box) |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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Disgust ~~~ . . . Heavy step bare foot Upon thick nail of rust That is what it's like When I feel disgust. Spew forth lies in smile Throw hateful fits of rage While I grow more repulsed At your sorrow evil staged Fool me again with sober kisses Words of love drip honey thick Hiss of snake takes it all back Upheaval strikes and I am sick. Photos embedded in my brain Limbs - entangled - positions - lust Grit my teeth and tears back blink It's what I do when I feel disgust. . . . Chris Barker July 2003 ~~~ |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
glad you aren't usualy disgusted. I would fear you. outstanding job  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think you look good sitting outside, on the box... I think we need to expand into these even more...nothing like stretching a wing or two, and giving our muses something to muse about us, don't you agree? Excellent, Chris... simply excellent! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wind and Karilea - thankyou both. It took alot out of me writing this way. I had to bring forth past wounds and feel "disgusted" all over again. But, it makes me also feel good about now and the future. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good write Chris! This one must have hurt to write.. Well done little sister. ~Hugs & Luv ya, Teed~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Chris - a vent of feelings, well done... BC |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Heavy step bare foot Upon thick nail of rust That is what it's like When I feel disgust. what an intro, a challenge well met |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou Nancylee, Bill and Raph. I think I need a shot of Southern Comfort....on ice please. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Chris, I applaud you . . . God Woman . . . I really hated to give you Disgust, but I have never seen you write this and you have met the challenge - tossed it aside with a shrug. Sorry you had to go back there but this is one amazing write. Thank you xxoo |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Chris, I know how you felt writing this. It's hard to look at these things, isn't it? You did a very good job with the challenge, though.  Hugs  Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Chris? I mean this as high praise--you just disgusted me! chuckle? This? "Spew forth lies in smile Throw hateful fits of rage While I grow more repulsed At your sorrow evil staged" ooooooooooooooooooooo...narrowed my eyes when I read that. You met this challenge and kicked its butt. Love you lady! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
LOL @ Karen...BUT...you disgusted ME too..LOL  I know this was truly tough for you, Chris, but you did a GREAT job on it. VERY well done! Hugs, ~Vicky "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-27-2003 02:33 AM).] |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
gotta agree with everyone else i enjoyed it Another dream that will never come true just to compliment your sorrow.....Disturbed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Gosh, thankyou all so much. I didn't expect this to get much attention. Sue - don't you worry...it felt good to be able to write about it, then take a deep breath and smile!! Thanks for the challenge. Karen - well....ya....you know. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
bump- up with the rest of these challenges..keeping them together |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
See how versatile a writer you are! It was as if you had been writing like this for a very loooong time! BTW, one Southern Comfort coming up!  Loves 'n hugs, Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Aww...thanks my poet friends!! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
. . Heavy step bare foot Upon thick nail of rust That is what it's like When I feel disgust. you did a great job, really nailed this one |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Great gargoyles!  THAT was amazing. Absolutely amazing. I lack the vocabulary to write a decent happy poem, but you have just proved your versatility. Even when you don't use it, it's a wonderful talent to have available to you. Kielo I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me.... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou so much Inkedgoddess & Kielo. |
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