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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2003-07-26 01:11 AM

I am overly selfless and underly nurtured
I wonder why God put the stars in the places He did
I hear the voices in other people's heads
I see the way that reality collides with fantasy
I want to be loved for who I am not who I pretend to be
I am overly selfless and underly nurtured

I pretend that I'm fine when I'm dying inside
I feel trapped in your bubble
I touch the remains of a dying universe
I worry that I'll never find real love
I cry about him more than I used to but less than I should
I am overly selfless and underly nurtured

I understand that most of my doubts are unfounded
I say that I will be okay
I dream of a two story house with a white picket fence and all that goes with that
I try to love people as much as I love my horse
I hope that happieness doesn't stay away too long
I am overly selfless and underly nurtured

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2003-07-26 01:39 AM

Rhonda...you KNOW I love this glimpse into
your deeper self...although...I do believe
I've seen it before.. It's great to see
it in poetic form, though. Love ya..
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-07-26 02:29 AM

"I say that I will be okay"

and thus we tell ourselves...

hugs lady.

I say that you will be okay--TOO.

c'mere you

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-07-26 07:33 AM

Rhonda,

I pretend that I'm fine when I'm dying inside

me too
xxoo

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-07-26 09:03 AM

'Tis OK to focus upon oneself.. That's where your world begins and ends... The nurturance falls into place... Nicely written Sky...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-07-26 11:21 AM

Rhonda, thank you for letting us see inside
you. I can tell that you're not selfish and
that you think of others feelings more than
you do you own. You will have true love and
happiness one day....with the white picket
fence and all that goes with it. How could someone
as loving and nice as you not have your hearts desire?

Hugs

Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-26-2003 11:22 AM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2003-07-26 11:48 AM

"I pretend that I'm fine when I'm dying inside
I feel trapped in your bubble
I touch the remains of a dying universe"

I loved this, and can relate to this part very much....

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-07-26 12:12 PM

OHMYGOSH!!! Fantastic! I love this!!
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2003-07-26 12:22 PM

You seem to know and understand yourself very well. Now start appreciating your SELF more and treat yourself as well as you treat everyone else, Dear One!--Afterall, you are the Fire that lights up the Sky!

EA
P.S. I not only like your poetry, I like YOU!

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

9 posted 2003-07-26 12:33 PM

Well...I love these glimpses into other poet's souls. But is it "I am" or just how we percieve ourselves to be. For anyone who shares and bares her soul as you have done is as lovely as they come!

Patricia

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

10 posted 2003-07-26 12:38 PM

Rhonda, I agree with Earth Angel. I like your poetry AND you. Great response to the challenge. Talk to you lata.

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

11 posted 2003-07-26 05:50 PM

Wonderful writing Rhonda, nice to see you expressing yourself so vocally and so honestly

Andy

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

12 posted 2003-07-26 05:59 PM

A very open and telling write. Simply awesome. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

13 posted 2003-07-26 06:17 PM

Rhonda,thanks for sharing your inner self with us.It makes it more a special write.I have to agree with the other's here give yourself the same love and respect that you show to others for your heart and soul deserve the same.
angelblueyes

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

14 posted 2003-07-26 10:26 PM

Oh Skyfire, sister poet:
I have so enjoyed this challenge and the opportunity to see how others see...
You ARE a kind and caring woman, who glows so brightly in these lines.
Well done. TD

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

15 posted 2003-07-27 08:29 PM

loved reading you

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

16 posted 2003-07-27 09:11 PM

You sound like me..... what a surprise.....

Kielo

I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me....

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