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Open Poetry #27

Lucy

Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

0 posted 2003-07-25 10:09 PM

Lucy

Familiar and queer dreamlike buildings,
with trees towering over moolonda street,
over the car, feeling the cars capacity to heat.

I am choking on the lost unspoken words,
her breathe of fresh air scratches beneath the surface.
Presently her eyes are warming me, condensing the numbness of the window,
the past dissolving from being a curse.

It all remains,
the condensed and transparent heart-like stain.

and what am i sayin?
with every word and every phrase,
you can only say it in so many ways.

If only if I knew what I want to be saying, there wouldn't be such delay.

cuz it will always remain,
the condensed transparent heart -like stain

[This message has been edited by Chameleon (07-26-2003 12:14 AM).]

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-07-25 10:15 PM

Great use of metaphor..heart-like stain.

Beautifully written.

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

2 posted 2003-07-27 11:24 PM

interesting write, enjoyed the read.

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