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This My Prayer |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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This My Prayer In the silence of the meadow in the morning With the only sound the waking of the wildlife May you listen to His spirit in its guiding On your journey through the twisting paths of your life May He bless you with the strength of inner healing That your soul will feel the comfort of His presence May you know that in that moment of revealing You will surely see the beauty of His essence May He constant be your trusted true companion May He lead you on your quest for all you're seeking When your path may lead you through a lonely canyon May you hear His voice in comfort softly speaking May your heart be filled with knowing that He loves you May you feel His quiet presence in mentation In your travels, may He always safely keep you In His refuge free of worldy trepidation This, my prayer for you, today and in the morrow May your heart be filled with peace and free from sorrow ~vlraynes Okay...now for a little explanation.  This is something that I wrote for the workshop this month, and after talking with Nan, I decided to share it here. The meter is pyrrhic/spondaic hexameter, and if you'd like a more in depth explanation of what that is, you can visit this workshop thread. Just for a little further clarification, using the first stanza as an example, this poem should be read in the following rhythm... ""In the SILENCE of the MEADOW in the MORNING With the ONLY sound the WAKING of the WILDLIFE May you LISTEN to the SPIRITS in their GUIDING On your JOURNEY through the TWISTING paths of YOUR LIFE" So...I hope this little explanation made sense to you, and now I think I'll just rest a bit. I think I broke my brain writing this one..LOL. "My friends are my estate." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is SING, it is SONG, it is great! Don't even ask me to try... but I can appreciate the rhythm, the timing, the control, and most especially, the effort required to pull together something that most cannot! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All that and a sonnet-like rhyme scheme as well... Did this take you eons to write? I would need a week for something like this - It's absolutely great!!!...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky...beautiful in sound and meaning...loved it!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Keeping this one for study... Lady?  shaking my head... You've got a lot of words to lay on us yet! Remarkable writing from a remarkable friend and poet. Love you. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Vicky, a beautiful prayer, exquisitely written with thoughts that bring tears. May this bring peace and healing. AMEN!! Hugs, Marti |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Vicky, you know that I love this. I love the thoughts behind the words...I love the rhyme...the rhythm....the construction of the poem. I also appreciate the time that you took to put this together. I hope that you don't mind if I keep it to study, too. I need to print it off to study the way I want to....if you don't mind? This is just so beautiful, Vicky!!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
May He bless you with the strength of inner healing That your soul will feel the comfort of His presence May you know that in that moment of revealing You will surely see the beauty of His essence May He constant be your trusted true companion May He lead you on your quest for all you're seeking When your path may lead you through a lonely canyon May you hear His voice in comfort softly speaking ============================= *shaking me head* now will ya look at this... Im STILL scared of a sonnet and you take this on....not only is the poem a high inspire but the work involved studying. VERY VERY well done POETESS Vicky-girl. You have a muse for every occasion...from humorous to dark to down right impressive. ( I got your email..will w/b soon) "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
just fabulous,, and beautiful..  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Wonderful in every way! I was just outside on my porch with a friend. She and I were reading from the Bible. When I lay the Book on the step, a butterfly landed on Revelations 2. It was like no butterfly I had every seen. My friend and I just looked at one another...Within moments, the same butterfly landed on the same place in the Book. Sorry, I just felt I needed to share that with you. This prayer is a perfect part of my evening. Thank you! Patricia |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is a wonderful prayer and an absoulute great write.I apprciate the time you took to write this.No way could I come close.You are a true poetess that shines on us all. angelblueyes |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OkayGirlFriend~ See what happens when you sit quietly in the meadow-of-your-mind~ You just 'know' this one is mine for the keeping~ NOW- because you probably won't ... I will~ quote:AMAZING !!!!!! Yeppers, when you make the time to listen ... it happens~ Vicky ... this is an outstanding piece of penning~ So much wrapped in the lines of thought ... gently flowing ... easy on the heart~ I love you~ *Huglets* ~*Me ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
A very comforting, and beautiful prayer. Excellent job with the meter, it flowed very smoothly! Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I always enjoy a well rhythmed poem. A beautiful prayer, Vicky hugs M |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is a beautiful prayer...James |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
My friend, I do believe your flood gates have been opened. Has Phoenix been warned it's going to rain? |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hm..i'm not a fan of such rhythm....but the writing is very well done..and a wonderful write i might add.. i believe.."southern tidings" would be proud to publish this one m'friend..  yes, this one should be published somewhere.. enjoyed..hugs, g I want to run naked in the Blue! |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
That thing what Rhonda said.  Kielo I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me.... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yeah I echo what they said If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I may never understand what or who "He" is but it sure is a beautiful prayer! Thanks for sharing it. |
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