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Open Poetry #27

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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-23 03:57 PM

Crackling
my bones are
kissing
the pavement.

You intrude
my mouth
to steal the
words that I'm speaking.

Breathe, relax
though inanimate
things are
moving.

Darken,
my sprain..
'tis lurking.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-07-23 03:58 PM

aches, this aches

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

2 posted 2003-07-23 04:56 PM

strong, nightmarish images.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2003-07-23 05:06 PM

The imagery and the phrasing is wonderful.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (07-23-2003 05:07 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-07-23 07:27 PM

Now...I saw a long sprint runner...
stumbling...
receiving artificial respiration
by an over-inspired enthusiast...

and not appreciated!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2003-07-23 10:35 PM

There's so many ways to interpret what you write,
and that is a very good thing Kaoru~

This felt like an accident waiting to happen,
or something like that!

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

6 posted 2003-07-23 10:37 PM

The imagery and your words are wonderful.
angelblueyes

JaiOfHeaven
Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 207
California, Usa

7 posted 2003-07-25 05:29 AM

Hey K'
You know you have mad skillz!
I love the way you work it.
no diggity...no doubt.

Jai

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

8 posted 2003-07-25 07:48 AM

Sadly, I relate to the feeling. Great write.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

9 posted 2003-07-25 07:53 AM

I am with the others..your talent is amazing..

I saw this as being trapped in something...

Susan C.

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