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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2003-07-22 01:47 AM

architecture

     point

I was lost in light
     in
         bound ceilings
and shadow-plays

disap-point-ed
at this
         prison-dome
but I

        found my point
        like a sudden spear
and walked through
the
sun-filled vulva of candle-flame

and found
my release

and held that shape
while the oxygen
raced

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2003-07-22 01:58 AM

Brian...I love this! I can't pick out any
favorite lines, because I love the whole of it.

VERY cool write, my friend.
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-07-22 06:30 AM

I get the point.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-07-22 06:44 AM

I feel like I'm inside
an acetylene tank...
and the escape will come
any moment...

excellent, Brian....

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-07-22 04:50 PM

the point being two responses up?

God how you mix my brains up
in a good way
xxoo

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

5 posted 2003-07-22 04:54 PM

This was very intruiging. I liked it a lot. Your poetry is awesome, I love your creative flare you add to pip!

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
*My poetry website
http://www.freewebs.com/poettree/

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

6 posted 2003-07-22 04:56 PM

something in the write and the arrangement that does evoke the feeling of being in the presence of some awe inspiring design

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2003-07-22 05:00 PM

Enjoyed the read Brian.
Interesting use of words, the vulva and the flame...excellent. TD

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

8 posted 2003-07-22 06:20 PM

Awesome!(how Bill and Ted)great as always.

Jason

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

9 posted 2003-07-22 06:21 PM

oops

Jason

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (07-22-2003 06:22 PM).]

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

10 posted 2003-07-22 06:57 PM

Excellent poem. I, too, cannot pick out my favorite lines, because I love this in its entirety. Love the ending! The language was very soothing. Good write!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

11 posted 2003-07-22 10:21 PM

*sigh* ... taking a deep breath now.

Yes I do believe I got your "point."

Awesome write, enjoyed.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

12 posted 2003-07-28 11:09 AM

what they all said.

made me hold my breath.

library. xx

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

13 posted 2003-07-28 12:16 PM

Very much enjoyed.

paleskingirl
New Member

since 2003-07-28

Posts 6

14 posted 2003-07-28 12:30 PM

- in bound ceilings and shadow plays
it's beautiful

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2003-07-29 04:57 AM

glad I didn't miss this one

damn good stuff

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