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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Mud-caked hollow gaunt eyes peek through the darkness within to glimpse a fleeting shadow reflection of what once was which I knew a long time ago when the river ran before you bled me dry [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-20-2003 04:09 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
found this one hiding in my journals . . . thought I posted it |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
So much depth, in such few words. Although sad it was a well written write. angelblueyes |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
reflection of what once was which I knew a long time ago when the river ran It still does, little one...... it still does.......You are still that same person inside.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Here's to your river flowing again with purifying, satisfying, gratifying waters again!  Loves 'n huggums, EA |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Do not bite at the bait of pleasure till you know there is no hook. -- Thomas Jefferson dance for rain  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes there's just no way around it flow again soon, ladybug |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you angel - love your name Aww Ethel . . . I know thank you little one Linda . . . yes yes please . . . thank you LR - beautiful response! and yes I do love the rain thank you Hey Dix - exactly . . . heh I like that ladybug - made me smile thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
ouch come on you you still rage torrentially hug |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ouch, dust off those books if you've been hidden more like these it's time to share |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
and when the river has dried to dust there is still morning dew to bring new life. Brilliant form and style, vivid imagery - what more can I say? Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhhh Bri . . . I rage? seems like when I try to rage it comes out sounding airy thank you hugs back Raph, I have been looking at them and really this is probably the only one that can be posted in Open without some tweaking (they are quite dark) thank you Kethry - you have said quite enough My goodness - yes thank you for such kind words Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-20-2003 04:26 AM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
maybe this was you, but YOU, missy, seem way to strong to be bled dry, but had the tourniquet pulled too tight, here and there, but you, like me, come up punching again. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Let the river flow down. You know a river is the only thing, on this planet, in the physical world which grows larger and more grand the more it gives away. The human soul has this quality covered for the rest of existence. Let it flow... *smile* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
good grief girl !! Talk about "less is more" .. wow. This one is going into my library pronto! hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Michele - hey always come up punching - we are from New York now - there IS no other way . . . thank you Thanks icey . . . I know just sometimes seems as if we thirst so much for nothing Thank you Chris, what an honor Have a tough time writing less Thanks guys xxoo |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
littlewing...I thought this piece was quite good. I especially liked this part: shadow reflection of what once was which I knew a long time ago when the river ran before you bled me dry That is some intense, powerful writing. ***Ivy Rose |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"which I knew a long time ago when the river ran before you bled me dry" Emotionally, visually appeasing. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hey, I really loved this one. It was sadder than you usualy write. Which is of corse my favorite |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Sue- This is really harsh. I loved it, however I definately don't want to meet the one it was written for. We see the light of those |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you IVY - means a lot to me that you liked Thanks Kaoru . . . appeasing? Liz, heheh . . . thank you ahh I just havent posted the scary ones Brad - trust me - they deserved it thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Another wonderful write Sue! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
oh godddddddddddd. you know this knocked the breath out my lungs. you know i know this. oh, so into my library. haunting, powerful bitterness.aaarrrgh the bloody pain! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"a long time ago when the river ran before you bled me dry" Sue...this hurts. Big hugs, ~Vicky "it is better to be a part of beauty for one instant and then cease |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There is nothing like the river wind and the constant flow of content... It is a sad day when it dries up and our dreams die too. You wrote the ache in my heart tweety. Hugs~ |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
awesome |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Tima yes gem the bloody pain . . . you told it well thank you Thank you Vicky aww Bluesy . . . we all seem to have it now, huh? thank you tweets xxoo Thank you Brad Thanks V! Thanks guys xxoo |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Hey you! I'm going to anouncements- I suggest you follow.. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
I really like the style of this one and the word choices. The ending hooked me. I love endings with intensity and powerful images like that. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks PK - nice to see you reading me Liz - what have you done? Must I? Thanks guys xxoo |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
it is so true when a relationship is not BOTH giving & receiving it will drain the giver just one reason so many - feel taken for granted May you always feel appreciated & Loved & your river flow,refilled by the blessing you have bestowed upon others  Mike |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I like this write very much, I've been that river... thats why I going sailing now, to become the lake... deep and full  .Parker |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
ha ha, excellent write. *every man dies, not every man really lives.* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
some have never even floated upon the river |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very beautiful write....very well done |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Sue Your words were so powerful, yet so sad. "We drop like pebbles into the ponds of each other's souls" Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I see that river is still running Sue. A wonderful write Maree. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Wow...really good. I had to read it a couple of times to get the full impact. I enjoyed it. Thanks! |
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