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flight to nowere |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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It's not my fault, the fault is mine I stayed ahead, I lagged behind When we took flight, I never knew It was to nowhere that we flew I picked you up- I pushed you down, I am insane, no I am sound we're just like trees without the roots we're falling- without parachutes (uhh...I wasn't going to post anything for a while, but that stupid last line wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote something. Oh well) [This message has been edited by Wind (07-20-2003 03:04 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Liz I know how it is when a line gets stuck in your head.. LOL. You did very well with working it into a poem though. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You did an excellent job with your words. angelblueyes |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I like your writing - keep them coming!  Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Different write never seen you use this rhyming scheme..it's bouncy..except at the end without parachutes not exactly bouncy..more of a splat thing going..im rambling again |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I picked you up- I pushed you down, I am insane, no I am sound" Geez....even when you aren't trying to write, you still manage to do it better (and more often...lol) than I do!  |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Wind...Truly a beautifully expressive piece. And, I did love the last four lines especially ***Ivy Rose |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wonder what the wind feels like in your hair when you're falling faster than you're supposed to.. Great write, always love your work  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wind, everything you write touches me. I hope you realize what a wonderful talent you have. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Liz, I've been there, in that conversation, in that moment, in that falling good write girlfriend |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Hey thanks guys (ehh Raph? Splating isn't a good thing. Was that negative or just sarcastic? Or senseless rambleing. Oh well, lov ya anyhow) |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
good job...i liked it liz...long time no see... ri *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I love your words I hate their sound falling truthful to thud of heart. Oi! don't ever think stupid thoughts like,i'm not going to post anything for a while! i'll die without my dose of liz sanity/insanity. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ehe, I try not to over-post. get better and more honest reponses that way |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
we're just like trees without the roots you said it Liz . . . nicely done xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-20-2003 07:19 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hey you- you changed your icon. And Raph changed his location. (Don't think I never notice these thing. Gem does it too...I have to much time on my hands  )[This message has been edited by Wind (07-20-2003 07:12 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I think this poem is kinda neat!  Huggums, EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
lol Liz - that was a mistake - the dove is right next to that gopher |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I love your lines and you know why? They are penned down by a cutiepie Loved your poem Liz Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
you can put that on auto ya know thanks sweetie.. [This message has been edited by Wind (07-20-2003 07:36 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Liz...this is a very cool write. I especially enjoyed these lines... "I picked you up- I pushed you down, I am insane, no I am sound we're just like trees without the roots" Love it. Hugs, ~Vicky "it is better to be a part of beauty for one instant and then cease |
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