Open Poetry #27 |
I cried for the first time since the breakup |
x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
there are no words to a letter i cant send my feelings are forbidden to speak to make her sad is untolerable tears are running down my cheeks knowing my souls match is gone an unripe watermelon devoid of the sweet taste i once held I am lost in my pain for My woman thinks i stray in the past I cant speak there is no resolve once my turtle dove has passed beyond my reach my soul lost in diction that once was so easy to express ____________ sorry guys..this poem is just raw emotion... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Tears can be good...if not, I'm in trouble. I cry at the drop of a hat these days! Wonderful write full of emotion and hopefully a drip of healing water! A woman has got to love a bad man once or twice in her life, to be thankful for a good one. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
expressed very good,,, A voice of honesty |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very sad...but that's okay, I like the sad ones |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I have to say you touched on this subject well and vividly.But as I've learned without a cry sometimes there shall be no release. Though this was sad it touched home. Thanks. angelblueyes |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mike, though this is sad, it is beautiful. It's very well written. Hugs Ethel |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
x8x, Strong write, well done. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Sad and lovely. Tears are ok they are the bodies healing waters. Bon-Bon |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
the best time for writing is when you're feeling.... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike "there are no words to a letter i cant send" To express your pain is healing...poetry will help...it has many times for me. Your poem is was full of the tears you feel. Time is a healer and a teacher. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
x8x_bigmike - and the raw emotion comes out in your pen, no need to be sorry, just keep writing it out... BC |
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