Open Poetry #27 |
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Kiss Me |
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Brad Majors![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia ![]() |
Kiss me she says three shots beyond drunk. Hold me want me till morning brings senses back Don't tell me your name darling crazed sex not hallmark love Whisper sweet lies my husband never did till he drives up funny finding us lying drenched in sticky lust final revenge for leaving me alone |
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j0n4th4n Member
since 2003-03-11
Posts 94 |
some of the word usage in here is excellent: sticky lust, three shots beyond drunk |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
iiiits a keeper! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
surprise ending! keeping this one, Brad. |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
its sad that i recognize that feeling with someone i was deeply in love with...great read. Mike |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Uh Wow...yeah that covers it..wow |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You've covered it beginning, middle, and end.Very well done. angelblueyes |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I would love to be your psychiatrist . . . (lol - not that you need one just to take a peek inisde your mind) How do you do this? Jesus . . . amazing xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-20-2003 04:31 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
At three shots beyond drunk, I would also be three stages beyond lust so I'm glad you wrote this - just to remind me how it could be. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
bump where have you been hiding anyway. had to rered this. Crafty write that gets you looking one way and sucker punches you in the end |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
the man drinks the first drink the drink drinks the second drink the third drink drinks the man... be that as it am that am de major good potree mistor brad |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
lol at some of the replies to such a simple request pucker up ![]() oh my, at three beyond drunk ![]() my lips probably wouldn't even work |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, talk about drunk..... three shots beyond is sure right there!! LOL Ethel |
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Brad Majors![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you all |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Mr. Brad/Dan, Loved the first stanza! Welcome back! Are you a GA peach now? Susan |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done! Cleverly crafted. TD |
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