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ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
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my own state

0 posted 2003-06-14 07:37 PM


Slouched in the front seat
newspaper rolled up
tossed aside
face hidden behind the visor
a taxi man called for hire

and you tap on the backseat window
a door clicks to be opened
you would deposit your daily load
don't talk to strangers we're told
so you crease a seat...slip inside
another sees how carefully you hide....

observed through a rear-view mirror
a slouched form stretched
ready to grasp a steering wheel...
you detect a rasp...a voice...
where will it be?
along a road..up a tree?


Now how many have indicated where to go
to find there's no real place on show
yet we set the stage for increased pace
cover blemishes with hand woven lace;
there lies a tension between a passanger of sorts
and a face behind the taxi visor in retort....


Of commands that stand the test of time
like multiply go forth, seek and find;
to find the place for us to reach
it's a destiny from backseats we seek.






[This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-14-2003 11:38 PM).]

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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2003-06-14 07:41 PM


What a great analogy ecrivan!!!
There is so much to gain from your poetry.
Fabulous insight!  Truly.

Thank you for sharing the ride.

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
U.S.A.
2 posted 2003-06-14 07:43 PM


terrific write,,,  

QjQ

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2003-06-14 08:11 PM


ah Martin, a piece of wisdom
icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
4 posted 2003-06-14 08:12 PM


"now how many have indicated where to go
only to find there was no real place...."


Right to the point!  Well done.  Thanks for sharing the ride.

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
5 posted 2003-06-14 11:35 PM


Hello icebox,

added a flair to those lines...and that is the point after all!

Blues Seranade,

and aren't we all in for the ride?


Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2008-02-02 01:50 PM


Enjoyed this poem

ARCTIC WIND

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