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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 2003-07-17 12:22 PM



Rev[e]lation

Even imaginings
become real after
time…
…you did

You found
in my fantasy
a decision to see
if a bubble
were to burst,

would either
of us

still exist…

fragile was the time when
you allowed my dream reality
to walk into your arms

can you feel me, still?

The taste of you
wakes me

and I would dream to
kiss you
again

if nothing more
than to revel in your elation.


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-07-17 12:35 PM


a beautiful write, and I feel like the subject of this is me, but that would be telling a lot about me then, wouldn't it?
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2003-07-17 01:16 PM


"The taste of you
wakes me

and I would dream to
kiss you
again

if nothing more
than to revel in your elation."


Oh my!  Oh Wow!  I love this..
and such a sensually soft ending!
A keeper for my library..thank you!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
   you haven't been listening.~

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-07-17 01:53 PM


fragile was the time when
you allowed my dream reality
to walk into your arms


This is so, so beautiful.  All of it...
A   for me, too.  
hugs
Ethel

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
4 posted 2003-07-17 07:17 PM


Soft and sensual...and very romantic..

believe in what your heart feels...

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2003-07-17 07:20 PM


love it...are you sure you weren't writing this one from my mind...I wish
hugssss
M

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160
Missouri
6 posted 2003-07-18 11:13 AM


I started to quote from this piece...but I would sincerely have to quote the entire poem.  Soft your words flow upon my heart as I nod in understanding.

Patricia


Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 688
USA
7 posted 2003-07-18 11:18 AM


Dixie - what a compliment - thank you!

Enchantress - another compliment - to be stored amongst your keepers...thank you...

Ah Ethel - you make me shine.  Thank you.

Scorpio - the romanticism was for you...

nakedthoughts - you didn't hear me tiptoe in, did you?  

Patricia...you do visit my mirror frequently...thank you, Lady Poet...

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
8 posted 2003-07-18 05:21 PM


Interesting write....and thanks for all your kind replies to my garbage....
x8x_bigmike
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since 2003-07-08
Posts 130
California, USA
9 posted 2003-07-18 05:26 PM



fragile was the time when
you allowed my dream reality
to walk into your arms

so true...you hit a chord

Mike

Brad_Smith
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since 2004-01-09
Posts 70
Dallas, Texas
10 posted 2004-01-09 12:22 PM


I love this!!! And totally agree with what enchantress said. I love the intricacies of this poem, it seems to have a lot of hidden truth even in the title. This was a joy to read
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