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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It was in the time of rain When sands of baked season Drink from the sky And flowers bloom In an overnight Awakening. The tent dripped on your back And across naked skin The droplets ran to fall warmed On mine. We did not venture the day But spent it in enjoyment of Booked verse of love Wine from grape And expanses of bared flesh That teased eyes with rose flush As exposed it grew warm From touch Tell me my love, Was this oasis but for then Or will the well spring forth From these crumbled stones That are now Memories And sand? If I would answer then the date palm would grow to sway with you on days of wind and I would taste the fruit of both. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (06-11-2003 02:29 PM).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my how I long for some of this rain! Well done as usual.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Clouds on the horizon.. maybe it will rain.  You know I love this! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, A warm wave of emotion passed with the read. Excellent write. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
absolutely beautiful words Ron. *s M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What is your muse on of late??? Your already impressive poetry has taken on a higher inspire and its been a very cool thing to inhale. Im still imagining your voice ... |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely written and thought,,, QjQ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron....A leaking tent never felt like this to me...must have been the wrong trip or time for me. Another beauty! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ron, this is the kind of camping that would certainly be a memory of several lifetimes....excellent write...loved the visuals that I saw from this.. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
It was in the time of rain When sands of baked season Drink from the sky And flowers bloom In an overnight Awakening... Fabulous words. Wow, I need to get to the desert and camp out! Hot stuff here. Huggles, Marti |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We did not venture the day But spent it in enjoyment of Booked verse of love Wine from grape And expanses of bared flesh That teased eyes with rose flush As exposed it grew warm From touch Tell me my love, Was this oasis but for then Or will the well spring forth From these crumbled stones That are now Memories And sand? Until this moment, I would have had a very hard time choosing my favorite from the excellence you so consistently give us. *S* But this one touches deeply... and has moved right to the front of the line! *G* |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ah Geez! I love the piece, but now I have that old Maria Muldar thing running around my pumpkin. (Midnight at the oooooassisss.....) |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very sensual, sensuous? which one? but good |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
to sway with you on days of wind I so enjoy the way you convey love and surround the emotion in detail. I always come away in awe while holding back a tear or two. This is so beatiful Cpat~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
The tent dripped on your back And across naked skin The droplets ran to fall warmed On mine. We did not venture the day But spent it in enjoyment of Booked verse of love Wine from grape And expanses of bared flesh That teased eyes with rose flush As exposed it grew warm From touch Uh-Huh!! I think it's about time for me and my Honey-Love to go on a camping trip like this one. And this...... If I would answer then the date palm would grow to sway with you on days of wind and I would taste the fruit of both. it is just WHEW!!, Capt. Ron. I did enjoy this one better than any of yours I've read, I think.....or maybe my imagination's running overtime tonight.....it's probably time to go to sleep now. LOL   [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-12-2003 03:10 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've done it again.... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
In this moment, I hear the rain and your words. I could ask for nothing more. Patricia |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
O MY Oh my, this IS really very beautiful... I love every single line Ron....and I'm keeping it. Maree |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
MMMMMM... that's all I can release from this mouth right now. Let it rain nonstop. Dang it, where did I leave my towel? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey wranx, that was actually Midnite at the oasis  |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
And just what does your canoe think of all the time you've been spending in the desert....hmmmmm? Nicely done, Ron. Bob |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
speechless |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I read it again, just because...... well, actually to see if it affected me the same way...... (Psst!!!! It did!!) |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is really great - lovely story and lovely verse - Paul |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Tell me my love, Was this oasis but for then Or will the well spring forth From these crumbled stones That are now Memories And sand?' I've been trying to formulate this thought for 2 weeks and you wrap it up in 7 lines. Damn, I'm impressed... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
ENJOYED!!!! ARCTIC WIND |
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