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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-06-14 07:50 AM



I think you straight
to the part of my brain
that sighs, not heavy
but soft.

Here you play
with stagnant water
adding the blue
crease of brow, so crystal clear.


© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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1 posted 2003-06-14 08:56 AM


well how lovely is that... cant ever go wrong with shades of blue and sighs.
Well done poetess gem.

Im still imagining your voice ...
can see the sparkle in your eyes.
I cant explain your power over me
Its understated understood & beautiful.
cj

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
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uk
2 posted 2003-06-14 09:24 AM


enjoyed.......RedStoneEB

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
3 posted 2003-06-14 10:07 AM


Nicely done, Gem.  I like the phrase about thinking a person straight to the part of the brain that sighs soft.  Beautiful.
garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-06-14 10:09 AM


Gemma, this is really pretty. A lot
said in a few words. I like that.  
Hugs  
Ethel Mae

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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New York
5 posted 2003-06-14 11:19 AM


Gem - very cool

as in they add the life to your life
so to say . . .
insightful

quite amazing actually how your brain
works and writes these amazing lines
confuses me so - you are far beyond your years and see what most of us do not
xxoo

zenny
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Belgium
6 posted 2003-06-14 11:26 AM


lovely gem
enjoyed it alot

hugs, zenny

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace
7 posted 2003-06-14 12:40 PM


very nice...i do so love your poetry...(i might not always say...but...i do)...h
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
8 posted 2003-06-14 12:53 PM


This is why I keep coming back for more. Amazing write gem
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
9 posted 2003-06-14 01:44 PM


I like to slowly sip the ink from your pen. That way I get to appreciate it more fully...

Huggums to a gem!
EA

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2003-06-14 02:01 PM


neat thought
ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
11 posted 2003-06-15 04:09 PM


Better than water on the knee ...

     ... but left my heart throbbing just the same.

                  

Artic Wind
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12 posted 2008-02-02 09:33 PM


lovely descriptive words

ARCTIC WIND

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