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An Error of Love
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An Error of Love |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Is it only the entitled which you entertain and lack of class which you disdain questions of rank a virtue or do I abstain? Are opinions just that and nothing more or lack of office that gentry abhors; what of religion, color and creed no to mention lesser misdeeds? Of the patient who chances cures at home as health care systems are run by gnomes shake the system...shake n bake a doctor's daughter labelled fake Of his malpractice, she is not to blame you'd sooner choose her had daddy come to fame. Her family's denied access to chosen tables doesn't exclude the fact of her being able and the good stand tall without titles. If it's only the nameless that you disdain rudeness comes with names just the same and honoured bodies return to nature whether of 'good' blood or high stature. Since she is young fair and wise why point out bloodlines you dispise in common folk honor surely thrives from which love may otherwise derive. So love the maiden for who she is a heavenly king will provide the rest if it's only a title for which you abstain question not common stature that you disdain. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-14-2003 01:18 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Martin, very wise words in a very complex manner, but understood after reading twice |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
pleased to hear that...but purposefully written that way  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So love the maid for who she is a heavenly king will provide the rest if it's only a title for which you abstain question not common stature that you disdain ~*~ Wise man... wise words |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
enjoyed this look at the false social parameters of love pounding heartbeats know no such boundaries |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ecrivan, I like the way that you see another viewpoint of things, and then are able to write about them. It's very interesting.  Hugs  Ethel |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ethyl, And to think I wouldn't be writing 'love' poems....hehe. Midnite, the pounding hearts though suggest never use the head, don't know about that  ...but the false social parameters is a sickening little devil, thanks for reading [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-13-2003 10:35 AM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Karilea, Good to read your comments, just switched the las two stanzas  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Excellent write Martin, reminded me of this perfect couple in high school. These two were inseperable they adored eachother. One day i saw they had broken up and had to ask why. It was because they found they were from different religions. Not even outright different religions but different factions of the same one. Love does not conquer all in this world though it should. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great job...very creative and lyrical. Eric |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hey Raph, I see this between a mixed cultural backgrounds where differences are more understandable as a cause..and also between elements of the same...usually pointing out who hasn't got enough money Eric, thanks for sharing,I had to elaborate on the connection between the daughter and her father [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-14-2003 01:20 AM).] |
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