Naked Soul --- Senryu and Poem

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Honeybee
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0 posted 2003-07-12 10:51 PM

Dedicated to my Mom's relationship with my father

Naked Soul Senryu
5-7-5

Emotions stripped bare
leaving soul vulnerable
to be raped of heart

By Melissa Long-Monette

Naked Soul in Pieces

You came
through the fog
with weather-beaten map in hand
following the directions to my heart
slaying dragons, warlocks fierce
to ease the memory of the loss
of my greatest hero.

And there, you were
at the end of the maze
with promising smile, handsome wile,
a tall, dark and gallant knight
upon proverbial white horse.

You saved me,
turned confusion
to relief.
We created a life,
a child, a beginning.

Then suddenly,
you fell to your hunger,
forced me down
and stole my womanhood.
You ripped my heart from chest
and poured it’s fractured beat
into your blender.

You diced my heart in spades
slowly, yet savagely
with the dull, jagged blade
as it crushed my innocence
through cycles of grate and grind.

Then, you stopped on a breath's passing
to throw cubes of ice in.

You laughed as your finger
pressed firmly on shred
mixing my fear thoroughly with the tears
stinging the silence so sharp
that my screams echoed off the glass
swirling 'round the blade
back to saturate the hollowness of me;
Leaving a heart drained,
liquefied.

You drank of my soul,
violating, devouring me,
a delicious game to you.
And when you were through with the taste
you wiped your mouth clean,
closed the lid
and left me alone;
Emotions stripped bare,
vulnerable, in pieces
to be raped of heart
over and over again.

By Melissa Long-Monette

[This message has been edited by Honeybee (07-12-2003 11:07 PM).]

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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1 posted 2003-07-12 10:56 PM

Jesus.. I am speechles...hugs M

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

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Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2003-07-12 11:00 PM

Wow...Melissa...such raw emotion in this.
It just bleeds off the page.
Big hugs to you, friend.
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-07-13 01:52 AM

oh God

this hurts, but don't stop

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

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Mobile, AL

4 posted 2003-07-13 02:36 AM

Such passion...should not be at the bottom of the stack.

Love the way you write

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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5 posted 2003-07-13 12:38 PM

bump

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-07-13 04:15 PM

Melissa:

Emotions stripped bare
leaving soul vulnerable
to be raped of heart

A part of life indeed, sadly
I relate - like dont we all?
and this entire write both
is the best I have seen from you yet
I have seen you just fly through these pages . . .
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (07-13-2003 04:15 PM).]

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-07-13 05:01 PM

Wow, A very well written and honest poem.

Jason

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