Open Poetry #27 |
Friendly Fire |
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
A hole in your chest smokes as you lie in a pool on the ground red is not your favourite colour but you wear it well today of course you knew it would come you've heard the shots ring out you've heard the ricochet but you never thought the bullet would come through friendly fire |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Dark, but good. Enjoyed. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ouch I like it when you write dark. It does good for you This one gave me the shivers, it did. If art is still inside, I feel it -Aaron Lewes [This message has been edited by Wind (07-12-2003 04:36 PM).] |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Hmmm. This can be taken many ways, Aenimal. So, I will personalize it in my mind...if that's alright with you. You have a great mind! Patricia |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks everybody appreciate the reads and replies |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
saying much, with so little. |
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Dylan New Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 7 |
fire right back. or walk away from friendly foes. enjoyed the scene. felt the bullet, well written. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
An ugly truth here, written with strength and sadness. Sandra |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks everyone just one of those days.. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Sighs...I'm gonna be unoriginal and say DAMN! I'm having one of those days too. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is a simple truth of combat; it is a painful complicated truth of life. As always, you mix ideas with great skill. As always, I am taken with the brilliance of your work. Thank you, Sir. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks melissa and yeah..a little too many days like these No ice thank you sir, you've made my day with such a fine compliment |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand those days Raph...lots of them had, and yet to come |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ouch...here... i am a bandaid...i'll stick to you...h |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Dixie know you do thanks h..hugs |
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