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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Sometimes things happen. Sometimes I sit and watch. I'm fighting a losing battle Time hates me, I’d like to smash its face, Ties its hands behind it It’s only simple mechanics, as my life is ticking away And they say that time can save you, As if watching the clocks stare will do something And clocks would save me If I had the time If art is still inside, I feel it -Aaron Lewes [This message has been edited by Wind (07-12-2003 04:33 PM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Awesome write, great timing  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks, looks like we replied to each others poems at the same time. But the alphebetical thing is against me  I appreciate your replyIf art is still inside, I feel it |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Liz, that was brill!--with a twist of lemon! This is a gem of a poem and it is a  Loves 'n huggums, EA |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'll have one of those EA. You're a keeper too If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
if I had time..and a brain..I'd say more.. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"If I only had a brain..." You are smart, just not great with comebacks. Thanks for replying CapitanIf art is still inside, I feel it |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I have the song Airbag stuck in my head. This happens a lot. Just random songs If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
We are always running with time. Time to do this, time to do that. Time heals all wounds. Time to get up, time to go to bed, time to eat, time to take a bath,time marches on. We even have sayings like Time stood still It is time for all good people...... Gee I don't have enough TIME to keep on writing. LOL. Good one. Bon-Bon |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks Bonbon, you cheered me up  If art is still inside, I feel it |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Time hates me, I’d like to smash its face, Ties its hands behind it haunting stuff. shiver me timbers. you always make me want to quote the whole poem ya little tinker. the part about wtching the clocks stare, as if it would help. and the ending. time, i've had my fair share of bad timings, and things happening at bad times, how time can break your heart. sigh. time should be banned. would that work? glad you told me i'd missed one. tsk, if i'd have known, i wouldnt have been waiting allll day..in the true style of liz >>>>  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hehe, you did me a favor by bumping it anyway. There's two types of poems that I write: shiver poems, that scare the heck out of the romantics, that are often dark and sad Gumdrop poems, which result from me reading your mind If art is still inside, I feel it |
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anwaarhassan Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 181Menifee, CA |
Chilling....nice read...hope time is on your side.... Anwaar |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Anwaar- your reply reminds me of a song..that hopefully I won't start singing LOL, thanksIf art is still inside, I feel it |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Liz...I LOVE this...very creative write. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks Vicky. Haven't seen you for a while? If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Dylan New Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 7 |
And clocks would save me If I had the time intelligent, interesting write here. damn, that feeling, like nothing could save you, even going back in time. nicely said. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Hey Dylan, welcome. I love it when new members have the courdasy to reply to other's poems If art is still inside, I feel it |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
And clocks would save me If I had the time Liz, I like this. "If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Ethel, your words mean a lot to me. I love that dispite our obvious differences in writing styles, we still appreciate each others poems. lov ya Ethel Mae If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Time hates me, I’d like to smash its face, You take the face I'll kick him in the ...uh..you know..grin Loved that line..yes loved i used the L word..phblllllt |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thank you Raph..I found your soft spot NEENER NEENER NEENER! If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"Time hates me, I’d like to smash its face, Ties its hands behind it It’s only simple mechanics, as my life is ticking away" _________________________ *Shaking my head here in awe of your talent.* I still can't believe that someone your age can write so powerfully and maturely of the dark and of life. Girl, if only you knew how I relate to the above lines. I'm keeping this. And I usually say 'DAMN' to Raph's poetry...well your poem deserves a DAMN! Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hehe honey, Raph usualy pretends to be British and says "bloody hell" but I got him to use the "L" word. Thanks. (Tanks a lot Anwaar. You've got another song stuck in my head I'm chuckfull O' lyrics)If art is still inside, I feel it -Aaron Lewes [This message has been edited by Wind (07-12-2003 10:18 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Liz, you're just so talented, it amazes me at times, so wise in your youth |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
amazing.....i loved it, i LOVED it, it was great.....inspiring, i loved it!!!!! great write liz, i missed reading stuff you wrote... riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hey Ri, thanks Don't it allways seem to go, |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
great lines gal...there is surely wonder behind your muse, and pen! I really enjoyed this |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Time hates me, I’d like to smash its face, Ties its hands behind it It’s only simple mechanics, as my life is ticking away And they say that time can save you, As if watching the clocks stare will do something" I do like the way you think Liz. Very cool write... |
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