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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2003-06-14 12:32 PM



  take my heart
  tear it apart
  make sure you just
  return to sender
  when your done

  i am tired of your
  constant puns
  tired of this situation
  tired of your aggervation

  please just leave me alone
  just leave me alone i like
  to be alone so i can just zone


   as my hands cover
   my tear shed head cant  
   take back what has been  
   spoken or what you have said

   standing along the shores
   of the line i think of the
   time the watch that slowly ticks
   away


   and heart feels like its
   just all falling apart i will hold
   my head up high i will not die i
   will live long.....yes i will survive!

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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1 posted 2003-06-14 12:33 PM


Very well written


Foxyoasis
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2 posted 2003-06-14 12:38 PM


Thank you

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2003-06-14 04:55 AM


this one hurts, but good ending
Foxyoasis
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4 posted 2003-06-14 03:24 PM


let me tell you,it hurt me to. but the beauty of poetry gets all of my negative feelings out of me. like a good cleaning

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
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5 posted 2003-06-15 03:56 PM


Very powerful.
Eric

NickTofteland
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 74
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6 posted 2003-06-15 06:23 PM


Very moving... so many painful emotions are expressed here.

________________________________________
  
   and heart feels like its
   just all falling apart i will hold
   my head up high i will not die i
   will live long.....yes i will survive
________________________________________

I am reminded of a specific female african-american musician... hmmm... who could it be?  

[This message has been edited by NickTofteland (06-15-2003 06:25 PM).]

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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7 posted 2003-06-16 12:53 PM


hehe,yea that last line i thought of that song lol pain is my life so i write what i know

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2008-02-03 12:29 PM


Powerful Indeed

ARCTIC WIND

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