Open Poetry #27 |
Onetime Rictameter |
QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
Onetime I after time Gave you a kiss of prime Your lips made my heart beat in chime My sweetheart was loving you such a crime Were my hugs terrible or prime With you we could both climb To love in time Onetime QjQ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. But I enjoyed the read. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
These are fun, aren't they? Shoot, after my first mishap with a rictameter I thought I would never try again. Wrong! Next morning I was working on a new one called, Learning. How appropriate, huh? Always had a habit of trying before reading the instructions. Very good, Q. I'll be looking for more rictameters from you. Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
I've never noticed rictameters before. They're most interesting. I'll be looking for them from now on. You've told a complete story here and it's amazing that you even made each line rhyme! Thanks for this great write! Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Glenn, this is wonderful, sweet friend, you tell your thoughts so well in this debut rictameter of yours, yay! (big hugggsssssss) Though I am not a big fan of form in my own writing, I do love form however and do admire those who can always pull off such great gems like these, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Glenn, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Another rictameter!! this is very good, Glenn.... perfect form, and in rhyme, too. Very good!! :heart; Hugs Ethel |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
Your lips made my heart beat in chime I especially enjoyed that line..very beautiful,but very sad. good write. Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
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