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Martie

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0 posted 2003-07-07 06:50 PM

Halfway to True

Down in the go between spaces
away from the nape of gravity
and time’s addiction
slumbers the opening

She said this as she caught
my reflection in the mirror
looking quizzically into the poetry
of the room within the room

Her eyes were mine but brown
and she had grown into a white gown
she said not to be discomforted by her lack of wings
the truth was there was no place to attach them
in this place travel was not to fly

I could see that it was true
from the corner of the corner
just at the center of the closet door
there was a place like a crease
in a cardboard box stamped handle with care
no room for wings in there

I turned slowly enough to be aware
of an extinguishing    sort of like candle flame
that left a draft as from closing door

and a feeling of gain   and loss

[This message has been edited by Martie (07-07-2003 09:08 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-07-07 07:04 PM

My grandmother
always said
"you're never lost...
you're right here..."

that's how your poetry is,
Martie...
if I'm ever lost...
I'm right here...
reading you.

Ratleader

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2 posted 2003-07-07 07:09 PM

A touching reverie, and one based in truth that is just beyond the edge of knowing. This is all gain...no loss. Once again you post a blessing for anyone who is capable of receiving it.

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-07-07 07:15 PM

"I turned slowly enough to be aware
of an extinguishing sort of like candle flame
that left a draft as from closing door

and a feeling of loss and gain"

An understanding nod and a soft smile to you my friend.
I know this place...
Beautifully written.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2003-07-07 07:39 PM

sometimes Marty, from the greatest most awful heartbreaks and loss come the greatest of miracles and gains...keep your chin up....hugs and well wishes sent your way.

mirror man
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5 posted 2003-07-07 09:51 PM

Enjoyed this very much.

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2003-07-07 10:05 PM

this speaks to me of something fragile, but somethng to draw strength from at the same time, not right out there, but able to be
pulled from your words by my spin, anyhow,much liked and admired of your
talents, tho i don['t always pop in

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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7 posted 2003-07-07 10:10 PM

Her eyes were mine but brown
and she had grown into a white gown
she said not to be discomforted by her lack of wings
the truth was there was no place to attach them
in this place travel was not to fly

Martie, not all angels have wings...when they aren't needed.

Heart hugs to you, my friend

Ethel

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2003-07-07 10:38 PM

Her eyes were mine but brown
and she had grown into a white gown
she said not to be discomforted by her lack of wings
the truth was there was no place to attach them

A beautiful, heartwarming glimpse into a miracle... your pen flows with love. *S*

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

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Chicagoland for now

9 posted 2003-07-07 10:42 PM

Amazing ... said with enough mystery to make me think.

Greatly enjoyed.

Ceinwyn
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VA

10 posted 2003-07-07 10:46 PM

uhh really I suck at this comment thing..enjoyed it tho...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

11 posted 2003-07-07 11:35 PM

Well, you've done it again. I really like that touch of surreal that you weave into your writing. It's a subtle thing.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

12 posted 2003-07-08 04:50 PM

I know I'll never be able to write with your grace... but I can admire. *S*

This was more than worth a revisit. *S*

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

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Michigan, USA

13 posted 2003-07-08 05:06 PM

Much to admire in you Martie...such brilliance and strength here.
This piece had an ethereal feel, like a dream within a dream.
Wonderful. TD

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

14 posted 2003-07-08 05:46 PM

And all of life is just that, gain and loss, but you put it into words that flow with time itself..very gentle smile

icebox
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in the shadows

15 posted 2003-07-08 05:54 PM

There are no words...

Margherita
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Eternity

16 posted 2003-07-08 06:03 PM

Amazingly beautiful! ..... a feeling of gain and of loss!
Love, Margherita

scorpio
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right...there

17 posted 2003-07-08 07:08 PM

I'm moved by this poem, Martie...deeply..

believe in what your heart feels...

Goodknight
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Ohio, USA

18 posted 2003-07-09 02:01 PM

Martie - you have taken me somewhere very special and my heart and soul were suspended in time as we read - thanks Paul

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