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Condemnation
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Condemnation |
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ljossberir Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 81Ny, USA 
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Condemnation Matt Keach I say it will be But it isn't now It won't be then It should be Yes, definitely It won't be Most assuredly It was never to be The greatest happiness That I know exists Derives from reconciling the shoulds with the won’ts Maybe it should be Justice is that flashlight That you stumble for in the dark Late at night, cowering from the storm But the electricity will always come back on, a minute before you find it Great humility comes from knowing you won't do what you should Constructed for the past, destruction ever lasts designed for the ages, conflicts' flame rages A million swimmers struggle, one finds a whirlpool Exiled, he finds a noose, a tear, a stool You loathe the serums’ bitter taste But the toughest thing of all to chew: The first monster that must be fought is you |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
sometimes we are our own worst enemy...very powerful Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
The unusual time changes make this an interesting poem, you get the feeling of conflicting thoughts through the constant alterations of the rhyming structure coupled with the total removal of it at certain pointa. I like it |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Justice is that flashlight That you stumble for in the dark Late at night, cowering from the storm But the electricity will always come back on, a minute before you find it Life is like that sometimes, isn't it? Matt, I enjoyed reading your poem. Has lots of different emotions in it.  Hugs  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write, I see wisdom here |
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