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SLOW CAR
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
FOR THOSE OF YOU WHO CAN'T STOMACH THE INTENSE STUFF. SOMETIMES WE DON'T see eye to eye darling you brought me here,no reason to defy aspects sometimes prolonged in parts of mind jolting me to free up the line.. disagreements.. can fuel pettiness... how's about trying to put out mine picnic tables reminding me of how you labeled my province of love.. heart disabled longing for a purpose,frivolous,like volatile doves without you i'll squander in dense air leave spaces blank decipher them here codebreaker..to heartbreaker for you i'll live in squalor I'LL STOP MY SLOW CAR... i could sit and wait at your window... watch for your somber joy... i love your face..i learned from your poise together did we have goals... i guess it's no longer important just to be sure i go back for old times sake for some indication my coins been flipped inside your soul..i hope your happy where ever you are. for you i'll stop my slow car... i never meant to leave you i never meant to leave you i never meant to leave you |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i never meant to leave you i never meant to leave you i never meant to leave you let her know.....maybe you can come home again |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Maybe if you let her know you will go home again is very true! ARCTIC WIND |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear gyiel marlok, You write up to the point when you have something human and heartbreaking to say. Like most of us, that's exactly the point where you want to stop. Everything up to there is risk-free. You don't have to be afraid of looking foolish, being rejected, putting yourself on the line. The job of a poet, though is to take that risk, face the terror and fail often enough to make peace with his wastebasket. You got through this time to the beginning, which is extraordinary. Most people never get that far, and most people never will. Now the problem is living with the terror of finding what you need to say. Having the guts to get this far, I believe you can win through. I'd suggest to you that it might be a good time to simply allow yourself to play with the language and have some fun. Allow the language to take you where you need to go. Can't hurt, can it? My best, BobK. |
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