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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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My attraction is desirous flirtatious to the point of being dangerous perhaps it is the riddle in your rhyme or the power of suggestion that stimulates my imagination. Magnified behind the class amplifying the sound of laughter caught up in a lyrical dance two stepping in time pressed between the pages reading you over in my silence. Your voice echos below the surface like a dream I've never dreamt subtle whispers lie in wait remaining hidden between the lines like the beginning of a poem without a proper finish. ~*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ahhhhh yessssss...the seduction of poets and poetry....the ultimate pretty blue flame  the moth loves this one Lori-girl... your opening first lines are poetry in motion...as are your closing. Well done groovy one  Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The ultimate pretty blue flame... Only you could come up with that and understand where I'm coming from. I tell you, I'm seriously thinking about trading my muse in. Thank you so much my mothy friend. Hugs JM~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A very attractive write! Your voice echos below the surface like a dream I've never dreamt Also very evocative. The dream waits to be dreamt! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Loved this look at the dangerous lyrical dance of words that can captivate. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for your meaningful reply Margherita....that was so nice of you. Like playing fire eh? I've learned a few things in my life and times, one being, how far I can go before I get burned. Thanks for reading Kacy~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This was so great Bluesy... What wonderful pictures you paint with your mind. Humbling. TD |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...words are powerful and can be used in good and bad ways...sometimes it's hard to know the difference. Read between the lines and listen to your heart.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome ending lines! good write! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
don't trade your muse in just yet -- this is showing a developing side -- it is maturing and possibly ready for matriculation... this strophe spells the eve of inspiration....this is your best yet -- and the harbinger of what is to come... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ohh.. Tht fits you so well. I'm gonna keep it I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent, Blues... I especially like the last verse. *S* |
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