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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2003-07-02 04:05 AM

sssssssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...........

I
   hear
        your
   heartbeat

                          like
two

notes

                on a piano

over
       and
             over

like

time.....

                  I fall
             into
                 it
and

      wrap
sleep
       around

my

own

                  dreaming
               of
               waves

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2003-07-02 05:00 AM

a very nice write - great display of words!
Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-07-02 06:51 AM

What a warm feeling
left behind
in words' display
of a heartbeat.

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

3 posted 2003-07-02 07:02 AM

I liked the tender thoughts and the way your art of words was displayed!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-07-02 08:34 AM

You look so SERENE when you're sleeping...

and? You just made me wanna go back to bed.

(but I guess that's not news, huh?)

Beautiful, bri...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-07-02 08:38 AM

Oh this is so beautiful!
And I love the presentation.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2003-07-02 12:47 PM

Brian~
There is such a soft beauty to this write~
Shhhhhhh .... ~

I really feel the conveyance of thought through those piano keys~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-07-02 12:53 PM

Brian I loved this and
I liked the way the
        words
             fell
                  down
and
   wrapped
around
      the
       p
         a
           g
         e
       s

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2003-07-02 12:56 PM

*chuckling* and you know why.

This is rather different than "chin on chest", eh?

*chuckling again*
Sorry! just thought of all those gurglings and whinings that our insides make.

Ah geez

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

9 posted 2003-07-02 01:10 PM

Very beautiful. Short yet full of love and a very interesting writing style all together. I enjoyed it very much.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

10 posted 2003-07-02 01:30 PM

Made me miss someone, hell...anyone.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

11 posted 2003-07-03 06:19 AM

lovely Bri . . .
ssshhh . . . keep listening
xxoo

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

12 posted 2003-07-03 07:23 AM

ahhhh, could feel the love beating gently...lovely write.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

13 posted 2003-07-06 04:05 PM

ooooh goosebumps.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

14 posted 2003-07-06 04:13 PM

brian....a sweet time!

freespirit
Junior Member

since 2003-07-03

Posts 24
USA

15 posted 2003-07-06 04:25 PM

I fell right into this poem like the words did on the page.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

16 posted 2003-07-06 04:58 PM

wow... breathing...

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

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