Open Poetry #27 |
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sometimes the wasp |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass ![]() |
sometimes the wasp sometimes the spider sometimes neither but never both each kills the other each wills to life the wasp would lay eggs the spider would feed sometimes the wasp sometimes neither one a creature of air can land and sting one bound to the earth can leap and bite sometimes the spider but never both neither immune, each prey and the poison of each kills the other or worse leaves it living but dead sometimes the spider sometimes the wasp neither hate nor remorse nor fear nor anger certainly never love only matching hungers sometimes the wasp sometimes the spider sometimes neither but never both [This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-02-2003 01:50 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool write Ed |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Liked the read...once planted a wasp on a wolf spider's web as a teenager to watch what you describe and watched the topaz winged wasp do it's thing on a trap door spider...maybe it was a National Geographic special..the contest mirrors the greater struggle of the forces in balance..or just slightly out? [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-02-2003 01:58 AM).] |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
neither hate nor remorse nor fear nor anger certainly never love only matching hungers Have you ever thought how some people do this to each other...then they both are destroyed in the process. Very interesting, Ed. I like the way you repeated the parts of it. |
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Bonfirelight Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 85London, England |
thoughful write. i enjoyed it, thanks. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I like this! well said! Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
wasp, spider, me, you all we need is love ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
neither immune, each prey and the poison of each kills the other or worse leaves it living but dead sometimes the spider sometimes the wasp neither hate nor remorse nor fear nor anger certainly never love only matching hungers I love the many layers of this... *S* A wonderfully written observation of nature and destiny? Or a piercing commentary on relationships that never should be but sometimes are... or still more? *S* All of the above? *S* Both is definitely an option in poetry... thank goodness! *G* (And if it's neither, blame it on lack of coffee *G*) Wonderful write, Ratleader... However I interpret it, I like it. *S* |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I see ya got Ruth's attention early this morning....that's a feat in itself... Very interesting write Rat.....I did like this one [This message has been edited by Toerag (07-02-2003 04:19 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader An interesting write, enjoyed the read. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
great work... enjoyed it ... also Michele's reply... ![]() regards sudhir |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, the "tangled web we weave"... Looking at that microsmic world of struggling for survival, can tell us a great deal about our own. Cleverly orchestrated, maestro! ![]() Stay fit! For it is the fittest who shall survive! EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very interesting write Ed. Much enjoyed the read. ~Sugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
liked this very much.....interesting and creative, with many interpretations possible |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"neither hate nor remorse nor fear nor anger certainly never love only matching hungers" Thought I tuned into the bug channel there for a minute! Vivid write Ed. ![]() |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I've got to agree with suthern's reply to this...so can I just say ditto? |
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Janette![]()
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
And such is the struggle in life... This piece fascinated me so much that I read it twice, to make sure I did not miss a thing. Enjoyed. |
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