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Stop Myself..
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Stop Myself.. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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I've got to stop my mind from thinking. Stop my tears from falling, keep my soul from sinking. Forget I ever met you, stop myself from feeling.. Keep myself from eating, and contradicting all the words I've been speaking. I must disregard the way that sweater clung to you, now laying crumbled on my floor. I have to clean up after you, leave no trace of your scent.. For I don't quite appreciate the way you held me.. No, I never found comfort in your warmth .. I've got to forget about you. [This message has been edited by Kaoru (07-01-2003 09:49 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
What a very well written yet sad write Meghan. Be well..be happy. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
strong words of a woman scorned.. good write... help keep it that way by doing a spell check.. You should find one error that can be fixed in a jiffy... "disregaurd" |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Sometimes you don't want to forget everything-maybe you learned from it? And besides, it's a fine poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
For I don't quite appreciate the way you held me.. No, I never found comfort in your warmth .. Loved this line Kaoru! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it ain't easy, is it? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I think when you start using words like must and should and got to, it means you don't want to. Still you painted necessity well. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Written very well. Sad, too :tear: I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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luckyme9293 Junior Member
since 2003-07-01
Posts 24tx |
i know how that feels....this hits the spot for me. i truly enjoyed it. and the way it is set up is perfect. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kaoru, you wrote this very well. I really felt a lot of hurt in this part..... I have to clean up after you, leave no trace of your scent.. For I don't quite appreciate the way you held me.. No, I never found comfort in your warmth .. I've got to forget about you. Hope things get better soon.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...as the old song goes, "I'm gonna wash that man right out of my hair and send him on his way..." Powerful, emotive write! Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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TasteOfOctober Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94 |
wow...thats really somethin i feel for. thanx The only difference between the creative and the conformists is that the creative will not be conquered and the conformists already are. |
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