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... UnSpOkEn WoRds ... If PoEtRy DiDn'T ExiSt ... |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? 
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... UnSpOkEnWoRds ... ...If PoEtRy DiDn'T ExiSt... i have no means of text based speech...how can the people hear the messages i speak? once thought of as unique.. poetry has been made obsolete not wanting to resort back to old ways of anger expression using harsh words to rid myself of rage and depression anxiety. and panic..like a bottled up schitsophrenic with a temper temperature reaching its boiling point in my veins.. steam dissapates from where air used to enter pores closing up trapping in the heat...sweat beads cover my exterior waiting to purge these feelings from the interior... making these conflicts seem inferior but what is poetry.... i can spell it...no definition is registering with my lexicon whats the meaning of these pieces of paper that rhymes are written upon lost in the labyrinth of my deep thoughts.. a mixture of emotions manifesting into something catastrophic no known soul or object could formulate logic of the topics writing pros and cons never helped me weight the scales of mental hell sometimes having a story to tell does well for those encased in psychological jails paper and pencils are my means for expressing things...without poetry.. whats to intervene??? no third party could coax the words out my mouth i distribute to the paper thats seldom seen no therapist could formulate or examine the bold statements that i make poetry .....brings food for though and i serve it to all who care to take a plate poetry......my only means of expression... i cant convert back to past ways if it didnt exist... my feedom of expression has reached its end of days [This message has been edited by GhostWriter_6 (06-13-2003 08:10 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
GW...welcome home! My time is short today, but I will be back this evening to take this all in. What kept you away? Don't let it happen again! LOL...  |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
I think most of the people on this site (including me) will agree with what you say, however I'm more interested by the way you write. I must confess I haven't seen any of your other poems so I don't know whether this is just a characteristic of this poem or part of your general style. The length of each line is huge, but they seem to be split further into almost lines within a line, which I like because it means you have flexibility. In this case the rhyming was fairly solid and bound by a structure. But the length of lines enabled you to have some freedom with the rest of the line. Its a fairly unique style but it makes a lot of sense. Also just a quick question, did you intend to leave the words "catastrophies" and "enter" on there own or did they just not fit on the line? Everybody hurts, take comfort in your friends, cos everybody hurts sometimes |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I know what happens when poetry does not exist, because for most of three decades it didn't exist for me.... You breathe, you eat, you work, make love, play the guitar, have little times of joy and sorrow....and you are less. Being less is what happens.... This a good and thought provoking piece of poetry -- so welcome back, to a guy I hadn't met yet! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It's good to read you again...though I don't think I've had the pleasure of reading but one of your poems. I do like the thoughts behind this poem. I think we all can relate in some way to your words. Thanks for sharing them with us. Hugs to you  Ethel |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
thanx for reading this one... maybe you all can see somemore of my work... i appreciate the feedback.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome poem Cold hands means a warm heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
FROM BIRTH TO DEATH |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Cool write indeed Passing Shadows ARCTIC WIND |
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