Open Poetry #27 |
The slowing of Angels |
wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Suppose then That Angels are quarks Of sorts Sparks That exist throughout Time Space And that once We Were such creatures A part of that heavenly host Until That is We became desirous Of weighty matters Seduced Into the sin of sensation The urge to feel Ecstasies Agonies And so We were clothed In the flesh that we wear Condemned Exiled Onto this rocky outpost Where we exist too briefly To fully comprehend The consequence of Being Graceless [This message has been edited by wranx (06-28-2003 12:09 AM).] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx....and perhaps some just don't know how much grace they have, like you. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yes. All true my friend, all too true. Now that we are here though, we can't get back until we are all done. This is a truly great piece of poetic art, truth skillfully delivered. Thank you for sharing it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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Ah, but we DID fall... and this IS perfect as is-- you just wrote a classic, yeti. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Very well written, wranx. Certainly an interesting take on the creation of humanity. ***Ivy Rose |
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TasteOfOctober Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94 |
I sincerely like the thought this poem provokes and the images it sets in my mind. wonderful. |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"Seduced Into the sin of sensation The urge to feel Ecstasies Agonies" Genious in your pen! I love this..... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thanks for sharing |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Little bit o Hawking little bit o religion= wranx brilliance |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
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Yes! Ed can't wait to duet with you heh I'm keeping this and I echo Serenity... A Classic indeed! Maree |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
urgh speechless.... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God Ed, . . . This is beautiful sad that it is so but beautiful still xxoo |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Equation: Lose the Weight Feel the Soar... ~*~ Do it again, Ed.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx I like the way you write. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks to all for the nice comments. This was born from a conversation with brian sites one night at work. (A 5 hour query on the "Original Sin") So, my thanks to him, for helping a night at the grindstone pass painlessly and for titling this for me. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
and you speak five hours in a few lines this is lean and mean dude |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
think I'll put down Stephen tonight and just read you |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
fallen indeed. a fine bit of insight there mr. wranx. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There's grace, and there's Grace, and there's what comes to a man when he reaches peace....which is better in some ways than either. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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