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Space between Breaths |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{From the Notebook} There are seeds within the tide voices within rain they linger -- waiting patience that I could open my chambered heart; weave this earth together with you-- edging horizons always, just out of reach Would he see? I wonder if he noticed the glass caught in sunlight; I never offered coffee, always hoping early mornings were dreams held in open arms, water colors in deep green somewhere reflecting blue I must have missed the passage of river and air, beyond sight and fingertips like-- softly falling snow on December nights but what does it remind me of? hard-wood floors and lost thoughts- New York alleys and Cafes, London and Meadow park every space between breaths there is no sleep tonight only the moon in open windows I look up and understand Through the darkness |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gorgeous write! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
there was space between the breaths I took in reading this to hold a dozen universes.... or at least fill that many with thought and admiration for the talent. you always amaze me... always leave me with that feeling of being clumsey in my own attempts... not in a bad way at all... just makes me aware of the differences and the difference between a house painter and a portrait artist.. both paint.. but on very different levels.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - what more can I say about your words. As always... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Penned as always with such elegant style and grace.. I am forever in awe of your written words. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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papabear Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 102Atlanta, GA |
much enjoyed.... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I was trying to pick out my favorite part -- but I would have to just repaste the whole darn thing! (exhale) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren You always write like silk in a soft breeze...exquisite! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So very rich in vision and deep thoughts. Thoroughly enjoyed. TD |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Lauren, yes, there is far so much more than what we perceive and we just have to believe we are there in each heartbeat! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
passing shadows~ Thank you for your constant support, I appreciate you! ~~ Cpat Hair~  your replies are always so honoring, thank you for always taking time to read.....( can I email ya later?)~~ Bill Charles~ I love how you say it, thank you~~ Enchantress~ you know, you are so lovely.....I always appreciate your tender and thoughtful replies....  hugsssssss ~~ papabear~ thank you much appreciated! ~~ Local Rebel~ (sigh) thank you for your touching reply.....hugsssss ~~ Martie~ I adore how you always see my words, thank you for reminding me how a breeze can feel......hugssssssss ~~ ThisDiamond~ thank you for letting me know.....I much enjoyed your reply...... ~~ Mistletoe Angel~ luya hon....have missed being around for you vibrant and wonderful replies....you always leave me smiling..... ~~~~~ HUGSSSS Greeneyes~ Through the darkness |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There are seeds within the tide voices within rain they linger -- waiting patience that I could open my chambered heart; weave this earth together with you-- edging horizons always, just out of reach Would he see? I wonder if he noticed the glass caught in sunlight; I never offered coffee, always hoping early mornings were dreams held in open arms, water colors in deep green somewhere reflecting blue I must have missed the passage of river and air, beyond sight and fingertips like-- softly falling snow on December nights ============================ every space between breaths there is no sleep tonight only the moon in open windows I look up and understand ================================= Your last line is poetic justice as thats just exactly what I think when I read your exceptional poetry...she DOES understand. Its apparent you see into the light and have vision beyond the clouds...for your poetry is written from a place where few ever touch. This is stunning my butterfly sister. Some day I want to run barefoot in your beautiful mind.  All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Always look forward to your writes though the breaths between each post seems excruciatingly long..thanks for the post |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"there is no sleep tonight only the moon in open windows I look up and understand" ....and so do I. This is utterly beautiful, and caught the state of mind with such exquisite clarity and understanding....think I'll stop talking and just go back to read it all again. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well? It all seems to have been said. I can only echo the thoughts above. Another bijou. Ed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back to read this again.... to breathe... to inhale its beauty...to exhale in its serenity. what I wouldnt give to read every single exquisite word in that notebook All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
... taking in ... ... holding ... ... not ready to exhale ...  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Would he see? I wonder if he noticed the glass caught in sunlight; I never offered coffee, always hoping early mornings were dreams held in open arms, water colors in deep green somewhere reflecting blue I must have missed the passage of river and air, beyond sight and fingertips like-- softly falling snow on December nights but what does it remind me of? hard-wood floors and lost thoughts- God..I love these lines..and the hardwood floors and lost thoughts... (chuckling) took me to place of long ago...and wondering if I would ever see... I didn't then... but remember the tender of trying. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*sighs* yea what they said If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, I read this yesterday, but honestly was in such awe at your beautiful talent and way of writing poetry, that I was speechless. I had no idea what to say. I still don't. I feel like Janet Marie...i'd like to see what you have in that notebook, too. Post more of them for us to read. Okay, Lady? Thank you in advance.  (It's good to see you back, too) Hugs  Ethel |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
sometimes I think just like that. It's a little disturbing but wow- that was amaizing. It goes into my library I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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MysticDreamer Member
since 2003-04-21
Posts 131 |
the spaces between your words and the words together leave me breathless |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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