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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-06-12 08:04 PM

Faintly tapping on oaken door
a lady comes the night.
In want a knight in nights explore
beneath the moon’s soft light.

A gown of gold and glinting bead
upon the bosom’s rest.
A hurried ride on lathered steed
a maiden royally dressed.

A month in wait to feel the heat
of passion’s flaming fire.
As two now join as one complete
their longing lost desire.

Sweet grapes were shared so daintily
and laughter filled the air.
They rested till their energies
returned in lust filled flair.

As candles glowed against the stone
of walls beyond the lie.
Two lovers soared in passion flown
beyond the moon filled sky.

And as the night did raise the dawn
of morn upon their rest.
A woman rides the green of lawn
returning from her quest.

A kiss was left upon the door
of oaken hue and steel.
To bring to dreams a nightly soar
of passionate reveal.

And there a knight does smiling lay
into the morning's rise.
Still dreaming of a sensual sway
and lust filled green of eyes.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2003-06-12 08:21 PM

Barry - what a great write. I liked the flow of this and all that it said. But Barry, my eyes are blue. A smoochie eh?, hehehe. Barry, you're the best...

BC

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-06-12 08:33 PM

Wonderful write Barry...quite the romantic tale you tell.
And..I have green eyes!

Much enjoyed the read.
~Smiles, Hugs and Sighs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

3 posted 2003-06-12 08:34 PM

Barry - powerful passion here - I enjoyed the story lots and got "lost" in the passion several times - great job - Paul

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2003-06-12 08:35 PM

Barry...wonderful story, dear man...I have green eyes too...sort of.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-06-12 09:25 PM

A kiss left upon the door...al anybodyleaves on mine are flyers and pamphlets..beautiful writing

gyiel marlok
Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 145
OHIO

6 posted 2003-06-12 09:30 PM

i like the poe like opening,it brought a sense of change up,like sweet melody,then to straight gritty melody

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

7 posted 2003-06-12 09:36 PM

I loved it. My school`s English Academic Bowl (I was in) just got done reading literature from midevil times..This very much reminded me of the story of Guenivere and Sir Lancelot... I wish I could`ve read this instead of some of the very boring things we had to read...Don`t read "The Mother Tongue"....Just a bit of info for you. But anyway..This poem was amazing and I can`t wait to see more of your work.
*Allison*

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-06-12 09:42 PM

Sweet grapes were shared so daintily
and laughter filled the air.
They rested till their energies
returned in lust filled flair.

As candles glowed against the stone
of walls beyond the lie.
Two lovers soared in passion flown
beyond the moon filled sky.

Oh goodness....my Honey-Love and I love grapes....and he also loves my green eyes, too. LOL

A very good, romantic write, Barry.

Hugs

Ethel

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

9 posted 2003-06-12 09:59 PM

OK, you would think after my meltdown over CPAT's verse today, I would know better than to continue reading romance...but you know, Barry, I can't resist when I see your name.

Just beautiful...

Patricia

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

10 posted 2003-06-12 11:16 PM

i enjoyed this write very much,,,,

QjQ

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

11 posted 2003-06-13 12:31 PM

Barry...I like the old-world feel of this. Transports me to a time when knights slew dragons and jousted to win the hand of a maiden fair. Great poem!! ***Ivy Rose

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2003-06-13 03:35 AM

what a fine story-teller you are! just a great piece of work!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

13 posted 2008-01-31 10:47 PM

Faintly tapping on oaken door
a lady comes the night.
In want a knight in nights explore
beneath the moon’s soft light".....

I have to say again!

you have a way with words!

Very Much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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