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to join dots in 3-D
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to join dots in 3-D |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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triangles, rectangles and squares circles and debating ellipses all in their own perfect world of the great symmetry dots close to each other and lines straight and parallel as I stand in the intersection trying to discover the angle at which my shadow slaps the ground like smog on the horizon filled with shapeless drifters like smoke rings of amoebic shapes and there you are in the landscape of the past where your shadow graces the lush green lawn like a stream through rocks in blue-eyed exuberance like a lotus glowing through the brown muddy lake daft as I must be, it will take this lifetime to stop dreaming of butterfly kisses that lasted just as long as coffee stays warm in harsh winters and then maybe in afterlife I can lie down amongst parallel lines and debate with spheres, cubes and join the dots in 3-D |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and there you are in the landscape of the past where your shadow graces the lush green lawn like a stream through rocks in blue-eyed exuberance like a lotus glowing through the brown muddy lake daft as I must be, it will take this lifetime to stop dreaming of butterfly kisses that lasted just as long as coffee stays warm in harsh winters and then maybe in afterlife I can lie down amongst parallel lines and debate with spheres, cubes and join the dots in 3-D ===================================== me thinks those butterfly kisses inspire you in wonderful ways...loved the imagery in this..and the use of abstract surreal entities as well...as always your writing is so fresh, original and creative. in blue-eyed exuberance and I just loved that line...both for the alliteration and the admiration of which is speaks. Another SUPERB SUDIR write.   All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
and there you are in the landscape of the past where your shadow graces the lush green lawn like a stream through rocks in blue-eyed exuberance like a lotus glowing through the brown muddy lake really enjoyed this passage... enjoyed the whole..but the lines above strike me for some reason. good stuff my friend... very nicely done |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Your butterfly dreams are our good fortune, Sudhir... Keep them coming, my friend...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Well done as you can see by JM's reply, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
GOD! This is brilliant! just an awesome write! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Janet, Thank you so much for your generous reply  Ron, I thank you... Nan, I will keep trying... Seymour, many thanks... Dixie, thanks for such a nice compliment... regards to all, Sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (06-27-2003 10:58 AM).] |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Nay, Sir...never daft... but the hopeless optimistic romanticist you be.... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 I don't know i'm speechless this is just umm woah?? lol I doubt that justifies how much I enjoy this...If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Friend, I thank you all... much appreciated... regards sudhir |
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