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quatro
Member

since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

0 posted 2003-06-26 01:08 AM

I can't help but compare
the ocean to me
the shore is my lover
and I am the sea.

The sandy beach becons me
and my slithery fingertips
as I tease every grain
with my salty lips.

Always reaching out
and wanting more
I pour all my love
on that sandy shore.

Never satisfied with one
yet jealous by another
the tide rushes in
and smothers my lover.

In shame I retreat
to a lonely lagoon
where the weeping willows wail
a pittyful tune.

Alone and confused
I wonder down stream
in hopes of recapturing
the love of my dreams.

quatro

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-06-26 01:40 AM

sadly beautiful, I hope you find what you seek

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2003-06-26 01:47 AM

Very well written - I liked the journey you took me on - keep writing! Roniece Dawson-Bruce

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

3 posted 2003-06-26 01:49 AM

Wonderful display of words, and feelings!

I enjoyed it!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2003-06-26 09:51 AM

wonderful poetic use of imagery, personification and
analogy in this bittersweet beauty.
Well done quatro!!

All I can feel is this distance between you and me.
I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me
because touching is believing.

c.j.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

5 posted 2003-06-26 10:09 AM

Well, here I am quatro,
and you up and disappeared...

come back and walk with me!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2003-06-26 10:14 AM

"I can't help but compare
the ocean to me
the shore is my lover
and I am the sea.

The sandy beach becons me
and my slithery fingertips
as I tease every grain
with my salty lips.

Always reaching out
and wanting more
I pour all my love
on that sandy shore."

goodness, love this part!! It's awesome

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

7 posted 2003-06-26 10:21 AM

beautiful images, very well written

quatro
Member

since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

8 posted 2003-06-26 01:01 PM

Passing Shadows,
Thank you. I hope I will also find what I seek. This game has been going on for far too long.

Roniece,
Glad to have you along anytime. The journey is always lonely.

Timothy,
I'm glad you enjoyed this. It was fun to write.

Janet,
Thank you so much for your kind words.

Decaflame,
My journey's are always long and hard and I look forward to when I can make it back and walk along the sandy beach with you - wind in my hair. Will you still be there?

SEA,
How wonderfully poetic that your name fits the poem.

I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you.

Kahlil,
Thank you for reading and taking the time to respond.

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