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Open Poetry #27

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martina
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 59

0 posted 2003-06-25 10:20 PM

Have You Forgotten
I lay here waiting for a reply nothing is said i wait for days months years yet no reply why must you torcher me in till i go crazy thinking about you why oh why must you for get about me what have i done pleas tell me

Martina

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2003-06-26 02:24 AM

this is so sad.....hope you hear from this person soon

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

2 posted 2003-06-26 07:43 AM

This is sad...and full of longing.
May your dreams be fulfilled.
Eric

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-08-26 05:26 PM

This was pretty short and to the point. Once again, I noticed a few spelling errors. Don't be afraid to have the dictionary as a companion!

Maybe you would want to try changing the format?? To ME, it seems more like a poetic paragraph...instead of a poem. But that's only a suggestion! Once again, though...you have conveyed a very beautiful message. Very depressing, but very good. Nice job.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

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