Open Poetry #27 |
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To Begin on White |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
To begin on white with some lopsided twisted thought a calypso from the past perhaps or the rock where I stubbed my toe it is all like chicken scratches numbering my thoughts click click faster now they come like black birds winged and mighty and dark dark they sing across my la la la in sharps that pierce my naked longing and they discord too rumble like the far left of piano thunder trouble sad sound and I listen as if to pick out a melody that would explain but I cannot tell you of dark hair or of scarlet wishes cannot march you into my cadence so you can keep time how can you keep time I have been trying but my poem slips and I am off in circles again falling into rivers even the waterfall hears me coming and winks with sunlight for the joy of tossing me about Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses and prick my skin to feel the sun fill up all my surfaces with surprise and then today I lost my count and I whispered to the soft air where where is my lost thought and it lay me down again on this white page where I have clicked my life and said someday you will see but for now you must keep up the good search. ____________ repost from before when I also lost my muse, as now |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Heaven help us when your muse returns, we will all be humbled then!! yanno ya know.... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Most Muses are wary of any change, of new awarenesses, of new growth, of new intentions - of all the things that develop character - I often find mine cowering in some dark recess hiding behind yellow caution tape whining, "No, no, go away. No body's home today. Go away. Go away. La-la-la, I'm not going to rhyme today..." Well, what can a person say to any Muse when it is sniveling and whining about some triviality of life. Sometimes you just have to grab it by the scruff of its imagery and shake some sense into it. (Though I will admit, sometimes I have gotten a little beyond cranky with mine.) Thank you for posting this great poem. |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I predict that within two days there will be a new post here, with your name on it. ...It's June 25, 2003...9:18 p.m...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yes exactly what he said ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (sigh) Oh Martie, I'm sorry to hesr your muse is temporarily on vacation but you always have such gorgeous thoughts to share and I know very very soon we'll be seeing many new marvels from you! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know muses are like that...she'll come back |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Martie as always, it's a great pleasure to come in here and top off a nite reading a poem that you write... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
they sing across my la la la in sharps that pierce my naked longing and they discord too rumble like the far left of piano thunder trouble sad sound and I listen as if to pick out a melody that would explain If your muse is "lost"... this must be the product of pure talent... and its quantity is awesome. *S* |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Honey, your muse has been so good to you in the past that we love it when you repost our favorites lalala... mine is on vacation too. Visiting sisters, I believe. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Wonderful never read this, ![]() |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Repost ot no, this is a beauty Martie. Ed |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
if that's a lost muse...gimme some! I felt like a leaf in the breeze learning not to sneeze at the lifting of fate, but to wait for the beauty of the landing. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Once in the whirlpool, the white captures all the electricity and writes itself... You shall never lose that which is the largest part of you dear one. TD |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
to begin...yes, and what a poem this is.....you have the touch of a painter, sometimes in black and white, vibrant color, or little tear drop, but always with your never ending style.....hugssssss Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Martie...if your muse is missing.. I can only imagine the words she'll sing when she returns..lalala! Love this..thank you for the repost! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I thought this read familiar in the first stanza . . . even checked the date. That's okay, though, a mired muse is allowed. Pull gently, she'll come free. Kraw' |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
maybe what you should do is come up here for a break... ha ha..! You would have some of the most amusing things to write of by time you got back... I guarantee it... much love Sis dale Speaking of ghosts, and after such an eternity. . .wouldn't you know, here comes mine again... |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, I'm sorry that you feel your muse is vacationing, but I sure am glad when you re-post something. I really should go to the archives to read more. I love everything I have ever read of yours. As Lauren said, you always paint us a picture with your words. Thank you, sweet Lady. ![]() Hugs ![]() Ethel |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
astounding write, very much enjoyed...you certainly have a knack for taking one away within your poems. Thank you and have a good day. |
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