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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Sun shining through my window birds chirping summer ahhhhh . . . Tides about my ankles splashing children sandcastles breeze blowing long hair whipping wind Flowers blooming madly ones I have planted with these hands which now shake When nothing satiates this ache and my hands clasped retailiate like a magnet repelling itself When none of this sparks the light to be reborn as once was in these eyes my smile inside of my heart Then nothing shall |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon |
I loved that "ahhhhhh..." u threw in there, it's summer what a relief! This was lovely, left me feeling relaxed and ready to go to the beach hehe ~Talia |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
ahhhh yes! Experiencing life with a K.I.S.S.--Keeping it simple, sweetheart!  Loves 'n hugs, Linda |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
smiles n nods..short simple and uhh refreshing?? If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
"ahhhhh..." a breath of air fresh and true straight from the heart of lovely Sue! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes! Ahhhhhh, finally. Needed to see this one. Thanks Susie! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I read this and felt a great sadness. I guess I misunderstand it. It is still a lovely poem. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I just feel like reaching out to you ..... to be touched by the sun! Every day we are born anew into the LIGHT. You shine so bright! I feel like icebox .... I hope you will be able to surrender to the beauty which IS. Hugs, dear beautiful Sue. Margherita  |
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David Carrson Junior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 25Carrickfergus N. Ireland |
Brought the beach right back to me!!!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I too felt a sadness. After an initial flurry of very warm scenes, in the end the mood shifts to what is within, not what is outside... An excellent write. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Talia - TY yes the beach - please do go Linda - yes if life were that simple indeed thank you Kris lol - the smile and nod were perfect thank you Edder - so very sweet to me thank you Ed - your welcome - for what? I do not know . . . thank you ice - you didnt misunderstand a thing - you are right on the money - thank you for seeing deeper Margherita - again - insight . . . and God I do try - I really do - thank you you are so very sweet to me David - awesome - I need to go back myself thank you Magnus - exactly - yes - what is inside thank you for seeing within sincerely Thanks guys xxoo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful write Sue...but such a sad ending... full of great longing. Be well..be happy. ~Smiles & Gentle Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LittleWing~ I think this is just elegantly done~ 'Tides about my ankles splashing children sandcastles breeze blowing long hair whipping wind' I'm soooooooo there~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Nancy = thank you - all I need to do is go and read you and I will smile again Marge - can you leave me directions please? thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* such a feeling this poem gave me...In my mind that is what makes a truly great poem....when it makes me feel I judge it great...so this one is judge great...Thank you for sharing it... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Star - thank you . . . I really needed to hear that xxoo |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
When nothing satiates this ache and my hands clasped retailiate like a magnet repelling itself ***** c'mere my friend, you need a big cyberhug |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
So beautiful...so sad...then, so beautiful. Jason |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kacy . . . yes I do TY sis thank you so much Jason . . . lol . . . exactly thank you Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-24-2003 02:07 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hmmm...a happy sad poem...those are neat too, but I like the happy on you better |
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Bonfirelight Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 85London, England |
Definate shift of mood..still lakes and all that. long hair whipping wind - that is a great phrase! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
The summer wind was in my hair, so much so i swear is was there.. great writng suz. thank you Goldenrose. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It is a feeling of lost, when those things we have so enjoyed in the past...that were or are so much a part of us don't give us the joy or simply get lost in our own internal struggles... you wrote it well... nice work...and I'm sorry..if it is true, this is the way you feel... you are far too talented and kind for this to be your lot in life... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Little One, I was feeling good and thought you were smiling until I got to here...... When none of this sparks the light to be reborn as once was in these eyes my smile inside of my heart Then nothing shall And it hurt me, Sue...I know that one day something or someone will bring the smile from inside your heart out again.  Heart hugs Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sue, this sounds a little sad, dearest friend, know only YOU can make summer days like this possible so just reach deep in your heart and paint rainbows and smiley-face suns, yay! (sigh) Here's special angel friendship hugs for you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully written...a lovely heart you have. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully written, what lovely heart you have.... |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Like Lee wrote, what a lovely heart you must have. I tuuuuuuuuuuly love your stuff, it's so ..........something else. Yours truly ~Broken~ Such griefs with such men well agree, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Dix - exactly - a happy/sad poem - but geez arent they all like that? Thank you Thank you Bonfire - love your name Thank you Phil yw - glad you liked Ron - you have got me pegged with the interpretation exactly and how very sweet of you to say such nice things to me - thank you Ethel - I hope so too like really soon and I am sorry this hurt Thank you Noah for always seeing the light inside of me Lee - so very sweet to me thank you Broken - as I adore your writing very much so . . . sooo something else . . . I love that . . . as is yours truly thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Flowers blooming madly ones I have planted with these hands which now shake When nothing satiates this ache and my hands clasped retailiate like a magnet repelling itself ~*~ You went from the ahhhhhh to a solitary figure... in one fell swoop. Well done Sue. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
with a warm and positive attitude as such, how could one miss...lovely write, much enjoyed! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Karilea means a lot coming from you Thanks Lee - xxoo |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I hope that 'when' never comes littlewing, that you'll always find something to spark your light! A very sweet poem... Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 Exquisite write happy or sad, I loved it! Tima C |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
it feels like sadness on a sunny day........ like being a potted plant in a field of wildflowers does this make sense? this runs deep, sue; beautiful |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Lovely images...but, then a sense of trying to recapture the energy, pain-free days of youth...to be "reborn." A great write. Patricia |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Lynne for such a sweet wish Thank you Tima - so very much Michele - EXACTLY YES YES YES you got it thank you Thank you Patricia - ahhh yes indeed Thanks guys xxoo |
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