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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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You are so far gone, seemingly lost as though you have fallen by the wayside straying from the path and the people who wanted to be there and care for you. Why bother to make time that bares no meaning like small change that doesn't buy much anymore except for a smile that you can't afford to return I take it back, and give you credit for nothing. How lonely it must be for you, oh no you say it is of your own choosing and it's better that way as if you don't believe in anyone but yourself a penny for your thoughts is hardly worth the time. Continue along and write your sorrow Hold your head down while walking in circles filling the void with shallow tears gathering up all those empty years. Keep your distance at arms length stand inside the gate, contemplating lock it up so no one can come near and threaten to invade your precious space. Be safe. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL..not sure whether to be insulted or thank you.... I think I resemble these remarks..LMAO... nicely done Blues... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Kaoru~ Thanks Nope, I would never insult you cpat~ My disappointment is getting the best of me today is all. Think I'll take a hike and try to geeeta life. Anyway, thanks for reading. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmmmm..I am thinking on the lines of cpat... well tomorrow is a another day, Lori even though I am not Scarlet...I do think she had the right idea  Love ya hugs, M |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lori, this fits your pen name to a T or was it a B...as in blues...for certainly HE is singing them... Excellent poem, go get that life, huh... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Once again we see both direct and indirect proof (as if either were needed, if a person has observed one or more in what passes for action)....men are pretty much fools, yep. You can see that in this poem, and in the inevitable sidebar..... A pleasure, blue lady. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Why bother to make time that bares no meaning like small change that doesn't buy much anymore except for a smile that you can't afford to return I take it back, and give you credit for nothing." when you write like this, so expressive...I just sit in awe...and smile....diggin it  awesome write |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
loved this one. Very nicely written. especially this line "a penny for your thoughts is hardly worth the time." Good stuff =) Joe |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Keep your distance at arms length stand inside the gate, contemplating lock it up so no one can come near BluesSweetie, it's great2be back here and to find this treat of a poem2nite is double the pleasure for this reader... Hugs2uPoetFriendBlues *~coco~* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: I love the way you take it in and spit it out . . . All ladylike . . . awesome write *nodding head* xxoo |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ah, Lori. Maybe the other person wasn't ready for your TLC. I don't know, but this rang a familiar bell for me. Once when I thought someone was rejecting my friendship, I reacted similarly, but later I found they just weren't ready for that hug.(Am I off on this one? I'm sorry if I am) |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Keep your distance at arms length stand inside the gate, contemplating lock it up so no one can come near and threaten to invade your precious space. Lori, it sounds to me like the one this is meant for, is afraid to let anyone get any closer than arms length....possibly because they are so afraid of being hurt again...?? Gary and I were both this way, desperately wanting to keep a wall around ourselves because we were afraid of getting hurt again. We both still have to fight at keeping the walls down. They are a protection sometimes, it seems. Sorry, I didn't mean to run off at the mouth. This is very good writing, Lori....as always. Hugs,  Ethel (Oh, I'll bet they didn't mean to give off the feeling of rejection, either...just scared.) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely written, but harsh in a way, yet sort of an acceptance without an understanding |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Bluesie, You have touched a cord that many an relate to but cannot express half as well! Your tender heart is aching, but only for a spell. Endure and we'll be there, trust me. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now, don't I know this place well and in that situation you have no power or control to change it either. With those that withdraw or close their doors to those that care, there is not much to do but fight or flight. I am afraid my life is too short so I usually just take flight I hope you enjoyed your hike, and I miss talking to you Lori, so will catch you on email. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You paint this sorrow well...and although I hate the fact that it is often real...I applaud your ability to write with such gentle firmness. Smiles from TD... GO TO THE FOREST... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Contemplate openly; so then you can see all those faces rather than get locked up in a telephone booth with the smudged windows and out there beneath the sapphire skies, remember what He has in store for you! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, what's up above is what makes us safe, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you do paint sorrow, with an unlining brush.....cheer up.....miss chatting with ya, and hope you are well.....hugsssss you Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Some wounds never heal but grow fragile, sensitive scar tissue and there is little you can do. Kraw' |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Who is this fool? We should all go smack him!!! I hope you feel better. *smile* |
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